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 Posted: Tue Sep 22nd, 2020 10:45 pm
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RainbowKeeper
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Nother one I reworked today. Like always feel free to comment and leave feedback.
Thanx!
RK

Lighthouse

...if the land is the body
And the ocean is the Soul
What may a lighthouse be?...

I’m the keeper of this lighthouse A‘
Livin‘ high above land and sea
I’m there to show the ships their way
Light up their path, guide them safely
Can see signs on the horizon
Illusions? Through the clouds they’ve gleamed
Watching the bubbles coming up
They are the dreams I once have dreamed

Through the night my light is shining. A+
Since ancient times I do exist
Tower‘s stones are getting porous
Cause of the storms, cause of the mist
I can see the dark waves crashing
And these strong winds could break my neck
But sometimes I feel that longing
To jump down there and don’t come back

My lighthouse B
Made of dissolving stones
My lighthouse
Surrounded by the seagull‘s tones
My lighthouse
Made of dissolving stones
How long it may resist anymore
Springtides and cyclones?

Feel the might of the tides. C
Experience their change
Feel the might of the tides
Realize the power of the moon
Feel the might of the tides
Experience their change
Can you hear him calling you?
Can you hear King Neptune?

Yes when I taste the water’s salt A*
I wanna douse my burning flame
Times when my thoughts follow the stream
The water is calling my name

© by Ian P.
02.05.2013/ reworked: 23.09.20
W by Ian P.
for: VB

Last edited on Tue Oct 27th, 2020 09:08 am by RainbowKeeper



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 Posted: Thu Sep 24th, 2020 07:01 pm
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It's very lovely Ian. It feels soft and has a nice flow.

Just a couple suggestions:

I’m there to show the ships their way >- I'm here...

To jump down there and don’t come back >-..and not come back



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 Posted: Thu Sep 24th, 2020 08:47 pm
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Tyvm Andrea!
Always appreciate your feedback!
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 Posted: Tue Oct 27th, 2020 02:37 am
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Hello RainbowKeeper,
i have read your lyrics "Lighthouse". I like it.The second line... 
"And the ocean is the sea". The ocean is the sea, isn`t it?Translation in German so it maybe is more obvious what i mean."Und der Ozean ist die See." Sea is just another word for ocean, land and body are two different things.
Land -> BodyOcean -> Soul ?  maybe  consciousness or life?
A Body without a soul would be a lifeless shell. And it is said, that Water can store information. Water has a memory, so i guess, it has consciousness, too. Water is life, without water, no cabon based life is possible as we know it. So Soul would make sense.
"What may a lighthouse be?..."  hmmm...  My House... like Otto Walkers lives in ? ^^Maybe your house, your inner me, the "ego", the "i" ?Standing tall in a chaotic sea, which could represent life.
"Living high above land and sea" Is the Lighthouse a god itself?
When you show ships your way, what does it say?
You are their guru? The ships adviser, where and how to sail?I mean it not in a bad way, like most gurus are. "I`m there (here) to show the ships their way"   the Lighthouse shows them, not tells them. Big difference. Most people always tell how good they are. But good people don`t have to tell, they show it.Nobody listen anyways, to anything ^^  So that`s the best one can do. Be a light to yourself and than let others see and decide for their own.

The word porous, i don`t really like. The idea to paint a picture with decaying, expiring stones to represent time, i love. Reminds me of the Russian Movie-Director Andrei Tarkovsky, he loved to show "time". 

Dissolving is used later.

A lil bit unclear what happened exactly.  The keeper wants to jump into death and never come back? Escape the miserable lonely life he has in the lighthouse. in the end it feels, like the Keeper runs out of time. Life/the sea is calling his name. "The truth is in you, not in your name." Finde die Wahahrheit - Böse Onkelz.




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 Posted: Tue Oct 27th, 2020 03:01 am
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I forgot to ask, in what kind of key is the song, any idea?
Or what kind of music have you in mind for this piece?
or is it a poem ???   sorry for asking, i`m new here and not much experience with writing lyrics ^^

it has a melancholy touch.


Is VB a name, or other meaning ?

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 Posted: Tue Oct 27th, 2020 09:16 am
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Bonjour,
Ty for pointing out the word „sea“ that was just my cellphone that seemed to laust put it there without my permission.... I changed it back to the original word „soul“ .... tyvm for pointing this out. (Mistiges autotype System)
The point is, that I have lots of ideas for composing and tunes for my stuff, but I need some assistance to bring it all together.
I do compose myself but my own skills are limited. But I usually hear it sung in my head when I write.... Dankeschön für dein Feedback!



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 Posted: Tue Oct 27th, 2020 12:33 pm
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You`re welcome. Maybe let us "work" together on our ideas. Put them together.
Let us see what happens.


If you would like to, we could speak on the phone some time. Would safe a lot of time.

Cya

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 Posted: Tue Oct 27th, 2020 10:54 pm
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Mhh ok gimme some time. Tomorrow I’ll be back home, have some stuff to do there till the end of the week.



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