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RainbowKeeper
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Hello guys,
Today I want to share with you an idea I had for a very sad song, but believe me writing it was absolutely needed....and important. I’m not sure about the style, but sure about the images I used, so I’d definitely like to get some feedback and thoughts on this one!
I hope some of you may help me here...and give me a comment!
Have a great day!
RK
IF A LIGHT GOES DOWN
(To Basti, Ela, Andi and Lea)
Don’t cry cause my game is over. A‘
My final match my final goal
No tears cause my story ended
I’m still alive inside your soul
There won’t ever be an answer
Don’t ask yourself why I am gone
See, love is a phenomenon
In memories I will live on
Through you I won’t be forgotten. A+
But please, let your mind find some peace
Unwritten is your own future
So much grief you need to release
This will be your final answer
If you don’t know how to go on
See, love is a phenomenon
I’ll never be completely gone
If a light goes down. B
If the distance comes closer
If a light goes down
It will shine even brighter in another sphere
If a light goes down
If the distance comes closer
Don’t be sad I’ll wait for you behind the great frontier
Without pain and without fear
And with the wingbeat of a butterfly. C
All the dark clouds will break up
And with the wingbeat of a butterfly
You will see the sparkling stars
And with the wingbeat of a butterfly
All the dark clouds will break up
You will see my smiling face high up at the sky
If a light goes down. B
If the distance comes closer
If a light goes down
It will shine even brighter in another sphere
If a light goes down
If the distance comes closer
Don’t be sad I’ll wait for you behind the great frontier
Without pain and without fear
There won’t ever be an answer. A*
Don’t ask yourself why I am gone
Have faith in the phenomenon
In loving hearts I will live on
© by Ian P.
02.09.2020
W by Ian P.
for: VB
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| Posted: Wed Sep 2nd, 2020 10:11 am |
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RainbowKeeper
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Thanx owen!
I appreciate it!
Ian
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| Posted: Wed Sep 2nd, 2020 05:54 pm |
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The subject is very sad. Despite the subject, this is truly beautiful. It has a very personal and heartfelt feel.
The only line that caught me just a little was:
This will be your final answer >>- this line is confusing to me
If you don’t know how to go on
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RainbowKeeper
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Thanx Andrea!
I really wanted to get your feedback on this one. Thanks a lot!
This line including the „final answer“ should give the connection to the lines before. The final answer you will get...is:
Through you I won’t be forgotten.
But please, let your mind find some peace
Unwritten is your own future
So much grief you need to release....if you don’t know how to go on.
Merci
RK
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RainbowKeeper wrote:
Thanx Andrea!
I really wanted to get your feedback on this one. Thanks a lot!
This line including the „final answer“ should give the connection to the lines before. The final answer you will get...is:
Through you I won’t be forgotten.
But please, let your mind find some peace
Unwritten is your own future
So much grief you need to release....if you don’t know how to go on.
Merci
RK
Sorry, this line just doesn't work for me. I can imagine what you are saying, but it doesn't feel clear. Just my honest thought.
Maybe it is just me. Hopefully more members will leave some thoughts and feedback.
Not sure why this isn't in the lyrics lounge? It is pretty tight 
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Thanx Andrea!
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| Posted: Thu Sep 3rd, 2020 12:34 am |
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This will be your final answer
I think you should take this line out or replace for a better understanding on what you are trying to say !!!
As is,it makes no sense to what the other lines are contributing !!!
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