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RainbowKeeper Contributor ![]()
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Well....I tried.... I tried to paint a picture of one of the most „mysterious“ characters I have ever heared about. Another soul of the Fin de Siècle period, what it makes the whole writing thing even harder. She is one of my personal „heroines“ even if she was unhappy and her life ended very tragically. Feel free to leave comments and feedback. RK Empress Sure they say ashes to ashes. A‘ But your legend will never die Born way to early, it is true That you were ahead of your time Strong and stubborn, fragile and weak Fighting soul in a golden cage While wanting to walk your own path Being beautiful and sublime You were sitting there all alone. A+ With a soul full of doubts and pain And talking, whis‘pring to the dead But those who are gone won’t respond Your latest tears won’t be your last Dancing with shadows night and day So restlessly moving forward Searching for all that waits beyond Empress. B Senseless life senseless death Empress Have you found your freedom? Empress Senseless life senseless death Thought me to give my life it’s own sense Every day every moment Until my last breath Je voudrais que mon âme s’envolât C Vers le ciel Par une toute petite overture De mon cœur Sometimes your portrait on the wall. A* The way you look down towards me Lights up my own disharmony -No harm, no pain, just flying free- And if it’s time we die and fall © by Ian P. 22.06.11/ reworked 19.08.2020 W by Ian P. for: VB |
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Andrea Moderator
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I think the words are really good. It is a great story. I am having a hard time find the flow in the verses. I would consider paring out some words. I love B, C and A* |
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RainbowKeeper Contributor ![]()
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Would it surprise you when I say that I have a very fast rhythm in mind? Like she lived...that’s how it should sound. Thanx for your fb! |
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Andrea Moderator
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Yes, it surprises me. That sounds different that I expect from you. I think that could work. I hope to hear it soon. |
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RainbowKeeper Contributor ![]()
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Thank you for giving me the feeling that it seems as if I’m still able to surprise you with something 😉 |