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 Posted: Mon Aug 17th, 2020 10:45 pm
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Overdrive

Chorus:
My heart’s in overdrive

It’s in overdrive

(Repeat):

Verse 1:

Girl, everytime I see you, you light up my fire

You fill me with so much desire

You know what want, you know what I need

Don't make me wait, girl can’t you see that…

Chorus:

Verse 2:

From your long, blond harit to your pretty blue eyes

I just wanna make you mine

You’re my every need, my pride and joy

I’m your good ol’ Country boy, and…

Chorus:
Bridge:

When you put your lips on mine, I just can’t resist

You want me, I want you

It don’t get better than this

Oh, yeah!

(Fast guitar instrumental break)

Chorus:

Verse 1:

Outro:

My heart’s in overdrive

It’s in overdrive

It’s in overdrive

It's in overdrive…

(Fade)...




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 Posted: Tue Aug 18th, 2020 02:03 am
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Couple of typos.
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‘harit’ should be hair

Good Hook



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 Posted: Wed Aug 19th, 2020 02:59 am
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Feels very upbeat from the lyric and that should work well with the "overdrive" theme.

Nice choice to start with the chorus.

In this line:
You fill me with so much desire
"so much" feels a little weak, maybe "intense"?

I like how your putting an extra word after the rhyme at the end of the verse as a lead into the chorus.

Feels very solid! :)



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 Posted: Sat Aug 22nd, 2020 12:43 am
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I really like your hook. Feels like a good country song. The rhyme scheme is a bit off, so maybe tweak that a bit.

And, correct any typos :)



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 Posted: Tue Aug 25th, 2020 03:33 am
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Interesting starting with the chorus. I like it



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