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 Posted: Mon Aug 17th, 2020 03:38 am
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Good Enough

Verse 1:

I told you that I love you, but you don’t feel the same

I gave you my heart, but you threw it away

Oh, why

You said you would see me again, but I never saw you again

I tell myself I’ll stop loving you, but I don’t know when

Oh, why

Chorus:

Why wasn’t I good enough

Why won’t you give me your love

Is there someone that you’re hiding

I’m tired of always fighting

And now no one can help me, not even God up above

I wasn’t good enough

Verse 2:

I wanted youto hold me, but you just left me cold

I tried to forget you, but the heartache’s taken its toll

I can’t let go

Bridge;

Why won’t you tell me that you love

Tell me why

Please tell me why

Chorus:

Post-Chorus:

Not good enough

Not good enough

I wasn’t good enough...



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 Posted: Mon Aug 17th, 2020 05:13 am
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Hi, JD... I like this a lot! It read well save for a some areas, as follows:

1. And now no one can help me, not even God up above. Try: And now no one can help me, maybe God above. Surely God is the best of helpers.

2. Your chorus is good, you need to repeat it after the second verse.

3. Bridge, first line: ‘Why won’t you tell me that you love,’ doesn’t quite make sense. Maybe: ‘Why won’t you tell me you may be in love.’ Or: ‘Why won’t you tell me you feel our love.’

But overall it’s looking good!

Charles



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 Posted: Wed Aug 26th, 2020 05:31 pm
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Good Enough makes the cut!

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 Posted: Sat Aug 29th, 2020 12:03 am
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It's a strong write J.D, one where you can almost hear the music playing.

The "Oh, why"s work for me. The implied pause there is like the person thinking about it.

You said you would see me again, but I never saw you again
I think you should tweak that to remove the repeat on "again" maybe:
You said I'll see you later, but I never saw you again; or
You said you would call me, but I never saw you again

I tell myself I’ll stop loving you, but I don’t know when
Very nice line

Why wasn’t I good enough
You might consider:
Was I not good enough?

The "God up above" line might put some people off. I think you have options there.

I feel like there should be a way to play on: I was good but I wasn't good enough. Not literally that line, but that concept.

It's a good lyric, and worth smoothing any bumps!



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