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| Posted: Tue Aug 11th, 2020 08:15 pm |
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jdtaper
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Verse 1:
There are a lot of pretty girls out there
But only you can make me stop and stare
I love that you're the one I've got my arms around
Got everybody talkin' in our little town
Love all this love you're givin'
It feels like I'm in heaven
Chorus 1:
It's only you
It's only you I run to
Only you, girl only you
Don't you know I love you
Verse 2:
Your long hair, your beautiful eyes
They shine as bright as that sun in the sky
Wearing jeans or a long black dress
Girl, you always look your best
You're perfect but you can't see
You'll always be an angel to me
Chorus 1:
Chorus 2:
It's only you
It's only you that I hold on to
Only you, girl only you
Don't you know, don't you know that I love you
(Fast, melodic instrumental break)
Bridge:
Only you, girl only you
Don't you know I love you
(Repeat)
Chorus 1:
Chorus 2:
Bridge (x3):
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| Posted: Tue Aug 11th, 2020 10:04 pm |
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M.P. Dudash
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JD, I can hear this in the modern style. I don’t see anything that really stands out in need of fixing. The bridge, though simple really pulls it together. Nice work
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| Posted: Thu Aug 13th, 2020 12:29 am |
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I didn’t see what RDM saw. Not sure it would be an issue t me got to add detail or contrast or summarize. Ideally with a catchy hook type phrase. That may be what it needs to make it more memorable.
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| Posted: Fri Aug 14th, 2020 08:50 pm |
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Wanted to visit again any updates on production
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| Posted: Sat Aug 15th, 2020 02:57 pm |
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I think this is simple and sweet. I like V1 quite a bit. V2 doesn't feel as solid
Your long hair, your beautiful eyes - maybe more details here (ie. long red hair, deep green eyes)
They shine as bright as that sun in the sky - this line is kind of cliche
Wearing jeans or a long black dress
Girl, you always look your best - ok, but I don't personally care for the 'look your best'
You're perfect but you can't see - 'you can't see' comes out of no where to me.
You'll always be an angel to me - cute line
I am not a the best to give advice on country, so feel to take my thoughts with a grain of salt.
Overall, I think it would sing nicely.
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| Posted: Wed Aug 26th, 2020 04:42 pm |
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I hope you provide a link to you singing it.
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