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LIGHT MY BLACK by Mot Juste
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 Posted: Thu Jul 30th, 2020 07:10 pm
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LISTEN TO THE SONG HERE: https://motisbeard.bandcamp.com/track/light-my-black-demo1

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My bandmate Justin Tyler Reed and I operate under the name MOT JUSTE; we are currently amassing and refining demos, so that we can get into a studio and record them properly. Here's one of our songs; I hope you enjoy it, and look forward to hearing what you think of it. . . PLEASE don't be afraid to give constructive criticism; I'm not a baby and don't require coddling.

NOTE: This is a compositional demo, not meant for distribution. I don't mind at all if you point out shortcomings in the recording/engineering quality, but it probably won't be relevant.

Justin and I both contribute to all aspects of all our songs, but it varies from song to song, so we have decided to just share credit for everything under our band name, for simplicity's sake. . . otherwise the liner notes would be a Dostoyevsky novel!

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LIGHT MY BLACK
© 2019 by Mot Juste (Beard/Reed)

Together we fall through the cracks
Together we shut down and turn our backs
I listen for your steps and follow
Your darker darkness smiles and lights my black

I know there's nothing for us somewhere
A place where we can keep the world out of our hair
We walk the empty places burning
No destination because we're already there

I never learned how to relax
I stepped on all the lines and broke my mother's back
Listen for my steps and follow
My darker darkness smiles and lights your black

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There is a second demo of this song that is instrumental-only; if you're interested, it gives an idea of the direction we'll be taking the song. You can listen to the instrumental demo here:

https://motisbeard.bandcamp.com/track/light-my-black-demo2-instrumental



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 Posted: Thu Jul 30th, 2020 09:58 pm
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Another great concept! Keep'em coming :)



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 Posted: Fri Jul 31st, 2020 05:52 pm
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This is interesting. I do not know what this is supposed to mean exactly "My darker darkness smiles and lights your black", but it's a cool line. I would love to have a video for this.



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 Posted: Fri Jul 31st, 2020 08:18 pm
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I really enjoyed this tune, particularly the lead guitar. Did you try mixing up the use of harmonies more, like every second line? They may be more effective that way but you'll know what serves your song best.

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 Posted: Fri Jul 31st, 2020 11:11 pm
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findmykeys wrote:
Did you try mixing up the use of harmonies more, like every second line? They may be more effective that way

I am definitely going to try a few different ideas, and that will be one of them, thanks!



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I really like the melody in this one, and the vocal harmonies add to that.

The intro is interesting with the distorted guitar vs the really clean guitar (nice sound there), and a good choice to return to that after v2.

The pauses between verses are quite dramatic and I like the way they break up the music. When it comes to recording, you may be able to experiment using another instrument like drums or bass during the pauses to keep continuity without losing the dramatic effect.

The lyric is intriguing, but I think the strength of the song is in the music.



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 Posted: Mon Aug 3rd, 2020 11:21 am
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An interesting song. I like the harmonies. I mentioned this before but it sounds like there's some Lennon influence. Nothing wrong with that of course. I look forward to hearing studio versions of these songs.

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