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 Posted: Thu Jul 30th, 2020 01:10 pm
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Copyright Mac Wilkey 2020

All My Ex’s Send Me Text’s

Chorus:
All my ex’s send me text’s
With images that once
Were very dear to me
All my ex’s send me text’s
Texts I can block but not
The memories

Barbara’s texts are from Las Vegas
Showing me the bridal suite
Joni sends me love and kisses
Says they’ve not had time to eat

Linda’s pictures show Niagra
And the hunk she’s fallen for
Then there’s Tammy in Miami
Says she hopes it rains some more

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I’d heard rumors they’d remarried
But I didn’t have to see
All the good times they were having
Now that they weren’t part of me

Doctor says I’m in denial
But the texts they send to me
Show me all the love I’m missing
I can’t block those memories

Repeat Chorus



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 Posted: Fri Jul 31st, 2020 07:34 am
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That's a clever and catchy hook! I like it!
The whole song is good fun and bounces along nicely.

I particularly like the "bridal suite" reference. Perhaps what she was looking for? Lots intimated without needing to be said.

In these two lines:
All the good times they were having
Now that they weren’t part of me

you might switch to the present tense to match the rest of the song. And the "part of me" feels just slightly off. Maybe:
All the good times they are having; or All the good times that they're having
Now that they're not loving me



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 Posted: Fri Jul 31st, 2020 12:40 pm
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Thanks RDM. I’ll use your suggestion. Also thinking a bout leaving ex’s txts out and making it a brand new lyric. A friend said the reference was kinda funny but he’s divorced and I think the lyrics struck a chord with him



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Hey, MAS... This is cute! Damn those exes. I wrote a lyric, kinda long, called, Exes. Same theme but a bit more torturous. Check it out.

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 Posted: Sat Aug 1st, 2020 03:10 pm
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Charles

I’ll check yours out.



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 Posted: Sun Aug 2nd, 2020 01:19 am
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Another good one Mac. I am enjoying your humorous lyrics. I have no complaints or suggestions.



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 Posted: Sun Aug 2nd, 2020 01:52 am
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Thanks Andrea. I’ve got a few more



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Overall nice!

I have to agree the last line of the chorus doesn't quite site right, maybe a little rework there might be in order?



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 Posted: Sat Sep 5th, 2020 09:16 pm
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Verse after chorus was what RDM critiqued.

Anyway, you should realize that the guy misses his exes. He’s not running away from them like “in Texas” song

Thanks for reading.

Still waiting on someone to sing it. Be glad to “fix” it to your satisfaction



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You got Chords?



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 Posted: Sun Sep 6th, 2020 01:35 pm
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Chords?

No.
I’m not proficient at all on the music side. I just know how the original goes and wrote as close to that as I could.

I can rewrite to a melody If someone can hum it or na na na it.



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John

Thanks for the Nice comment



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okay! what was the original?



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I wrote a parody of George straits. All My Exes Live in Texas. You can find chords by entering “chords for all my exes live in Texas”. There are several versions available. If you want to make your own version you have my permission to use my lyrics. Just give me credit for lyrics I’ll be happy as long as I can say I wrote the words. Also I’ll be glad to revise words if you want me to.



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