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 Posted: Thu Jul 30th, 2020 07:24 am
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M.P. Dudash
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I want much more than one..night of passion
I want our dreams and desires to come true
I want each memory, to be beyond our belief
That’s what I want...with you

That’s what I want
That’s what I need
From the first time I met you, I believe
You changed my whole world
You are my soulmate girl
That’s what I want with you

You make me see that life... is worth living
You’ve been a rock when I’m on..sinking sands
What you must understand, is I’m your biggest fan
I’ll forever want.. you girl

You’re what I want
You’re what I need
Let me show you complete.... ecstasy
I wear my heart on my sleeve, let me make you complete
That’s what I want with you

Come hell or high water, I’ll be here
We’ve missed years and what a price we have paid
It’s never seemed right, without your kiss goodnight
I’ve always wanted you girl

You’re what I want
You’re what I need
Let me show you complete.... ecstasy
I wear my heart on my sleeve, let me make you complete
That’s what I want with you

I wear my heart on my sleeve, you make me complete
You’re what I want.... in this world

You’re what I want in this...world

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 Posted: Thu Jul 30th, 2020 01:05 pm
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Another good one

I see the line ending in “fan” and I think he settled for an easy rhyme BUT then I think. “It fits”. It’s fine for now.

I’ve been to some other forums and seen how a little nit pick can fester and destroy a really good lyric. Now I’m saying don’t worry about a word here or there. Keep the train rolling. No need to pick every piece of slag out of the coal bin.



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 Posted: Fri Jul 31st, 2020 07:16 am
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Flows very nicely! Not seeing anything there that troubles me.

My favorite line is the switch at:
you make me complete
I think that works very well.

For your title, you might extend that to:
What I want with you
to place the emphasis on the two of them



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