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 Posted: Sun Jun 28th, 2020 09:16 pm
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When I don’t have a title, I write verses or a bridge first. When I do, I do the chorus first. This is the former. CMA

Another Face In The Crowd

Verse 1:
Saw you through the crowd, it was dark, it was loud
Will you snag another heart or will he be spared
I know about the web you weave, how your prey’s ensnared
I can see your every move and how he’s unprepared
But I still feel the thrill of when my heart was aroused
You’re not just another face in the crowd

Chorus:
No, you’re not just another face in the crowd
You got that southern charm, dark hair and hazel eyes
Your smile and sighs alone can hypnotize
And when they hear you speak, their knees get kinda weak
Those boys’ll kiss your feet, break the law if you say it’s allowed
You’re not just another face in the crowd

Verse 2:
Living in a cloud, I was lost, full of doubt
You played like you understood and you seemed so kind
Told you about my broken heart, all the world seemed fine
I fell for you in a snap but think I lost my mind
With good looks you scheme and shroud, it shouldn’t be allowed
You’re not just another face in the crowd

Chorus:
No, you’re not just another face in the crowd
You got that southern charm, dark hair and hazel eyes
Your smile and sighs alone can hypnotize
And when I hear you speak, my knees get kinda weak
This boy’ll kiss your feet, break the law if you say it’s allowed
You’re not just another face in the crowd

Bridge:
Lovers’ hearts you’ve spent, dreams you left undreamt
Lurk beneath the shadows in your eyes
Words you shoulda said, words you wish you meant
Darken all the truths, benefit the lies
Promises all broken, apologies unsaid
Cry out despite your fake-humble pride

Pre-chorus:
You think you have ‘em fooled with your beauty and your wow
Your heartless ploys should qualify as crimes

Chorus:
You’re not just another face in the crowd
You got that southern charm, dark hair and hazel eyes
Your smile and sighs alone can hypnotize
And when they hear you speak, their knees get kinda weak
Those boys’ll kiss your feet, break the law if you say it’s allowed
You’re not just another face in the crowd

Post Chorus:
No, you’re not just another face... in the crowd

© 2020 Charles M Anderson

Last edited on Wed Jul 1st, 2020 02:51 am by cmaja



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 Posted: Mon Jun 29th, 2020 06:51 am
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Charles,
you might consider swapping:
You’re not just another face in the crowd > You're just not another face in the crowd

it might sing more smoothly, even if it is less grammatically correct. Particularly at the end of the verses and chorus (perhaps not at the start of the chorus).

Interesting rhyming scheme you've got going here.



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 Posted: Mon Jun 29th, 2020 08:07 am
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Thanks, RD Man for you review and comments. I sang it both ways and even without ‘just’, but a lot of that’s gonna depend on the singer and how it’s composed. I’ve had singers, sometimes subconsciously, change my lyrics to fit their singing style. That’s okay with me; I just change the lyrics to whatever they sing, as long as it doesn’t change the overall composition. I love collaboration!

I like to try new and interesting rhyming patterns. It’s fun!

Charles

Last edited on Mon Jun 29th, 2020 08:11 am by cmaja



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 Posted: Mon Jun 29th, 2020 08:15 am
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Yep, that makes a lot of sense!



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Hi Charles, I like the theme of your lyrics. It reads pretty smooth. I will offer a couple suggestion to use or lose:

I fell for you in a snap but think I lost my mind
I fell for you in a snap, in the moment lost my mind

Words you shoulda said, words you never meant
Words you shoulda said, words you wish you meant

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Andrea wrote:
Hi Charles, I like the theme of your lyrics. It's read pretty smooth. I will offer a couple suggestion to use or lose:

I fell for you in a snap but think I lost my mind
I fell for you in a snap, in the moment lost my mind

Words you shoulda said, words you never meant
Words you shoulda said, words you wish you meant


Thanks a lot, Andrea... I used your second suggestion, ‘words you wish you meant’. That works much better. Always appreciate your ideas.

Charles



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