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You’re The Song In Me
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 Posted: Wed Jun 17th, 2020 07:35 am
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Working on this for a few days among others. I do write love song lyrics that ain’t broken-hearted. CMA

You’re The Song In Me

Verse 1:
Your pirate smile, your cowgirl style
Your soulful wink says, “stay a little while”
Your soft perfume, luscious voice so smooth
You make me feel, we’re alone in the room
And words that frolic in my head
Come out in verse from your honey lips
The chorus sweet like a choc’late treat
‘Cause you read my heart like a movie script

Chorus:
You’re the song in me that gives my life its spark
You’re the call in the breeze that rustles in the trees
You’re the song in me that echoes in my heart
That soothes my soul, sets my mind at ease
You’re the light that subdues the dark
A soulful morning lark, you’re the song in me, in me

Verse 2:
You grab my hand, you say let’s dance
Your soft blue-gray eyes hold me in a trance
You move so cute in your western boots
Your dance of love leaves me without excuse
And my thoughts end with the first kiss
Lost in your song whispered in my ears
Like prayers so pure coming from my core
Seems we’ve been in love for a thousand years

Chorus:
You’re the song in me that gives my life its spark
You’re the call in the breeze that rustles in the trees
You’re the song in me that echoes in my heart
That soothes my soul, sets my mind at ease
You’re the light that subdues the dark
A soulful morning lark, you’re the song, you are the song

Bridge:
That I hear waking from a heavenly dream
When the angels sing out heartfelt harmonies
The flutter of their wings, like orchestrated strings
Performing in spiritual symphonies

(Instrumental break)

Pre-chorus:
Can you be, can you be
You gotta be the one

Chorus:
You’re the song in me that gives my life its spark
You’re the call in the breeze that rustles in the trees
You’re the song in me that echeos in my heart
That soothes my soul, sets my mind at ease
You’re the light that subdues the dark
A soulful morning lark, you’re the song in me, in me

Post Chorus:
You’re the song... you’re the song in me, in me...

© 2020 Charles M Anderson

Last edited on Mon Aug 3rd, 2020 02:35 am by cmaja



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 Posted: Mon Jun 22nd, 2020 06:33 pm
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I'm not sure why there hasn't been any replies but I really liked the lyrics.

Your rhyming words enabled a good flow and I can see your story being sung

I also thought you have good images which shows me what is happening rather than just telling me.

Good one !!!



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 Posted: Mon Jun 22nd, 2020 07:54 pm
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Hey, wkamen... Thanks for your review and positive comments. In summer there’s less activity, so no comments are not unusual.

Writing lyrics is like painting but with very few brushstrokes, so every word counts and the picture must be vibrantly clear. So I keep that in mind while adhering to the myriad guidelines required for making a singable, sellable lyric. It’s a merge between the right and the left brain and years of application. But, I love it, since I got it pretty much down pat. Enjoy, peace.

Charles



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 Posted: Wed Jun 24th, 2020 11:41 pm
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HI Charles, This is so sweet. I love V1 - my favorite. The flow is nice. I did caught up in my head at "And my thoughts end with the first kiss" I need one more word - (And) my thoughts surrender with the first kiss?

I am not a fan of the bridge. It feels a little over the top to me. The rest is so natural and "down to earth' that I doesn't work for me.

Anyway, it sounds like it could be a great country song.



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Andrea wrote:
HI Charles, This is so sweet. I love V1 - my favorite. The flow is nice. I did caught up in my head at "And my thoughts end with the first kiss" I need one more word - (And) my thoughts surrender with the first kiss?

I am not a fan of the bridge. It feels a little over the top to me. The rest is so natural and "down to earth' that it doesn't work for me.

Anyway, it sounds like it could be a great country song.


Thank you, Andrea... I don’t right many love songs that come out positive. I decided I needed to do one once in awhile. I’m pleased you enjoyed it.

The bridge is softer than the rest but very real. I’ve had the experience many times. Sometimes I hear music, other times I wake with a cavalcade of musical lyrics running through my head. One time I wrote them down, completing the lyric, My Heart’s Desire, in less than an hour with only two minor changes. It’s quite an experience and I think a lot of musical artist have them. That bridge is kind of a rough description of it.

Charles



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 Posted: Mon Aug 3rd, 2020 12:57 am
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I like it

Typo trace should be trance

Good job as usaual. Give this guy some music people!



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 Posted: Mon Aug 3rd, 2020 02:36 am
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Thanks, MAS for the correction. Glad you like it! Appreciate your reviews.

Charles



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