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She Doesn’t Try
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 Posted: Mon Jun 15th, 2020 08:05 am
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cmaja
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I wrote this to a completed musical composition a few months ago. But the composer didn’t finish the process and send me a mp3. I’m pretty much done with seeking out amateur composers. I will write lyrics for those who ask me to add lyrics to their music. Or work with anyone who wants to add music to my lyrics. CMA

She Doesn’t Try

Verse 1:
She like to paint her wardrobe red
I stick with blues and grays instead
She stays out till the morning light
I’m home long before midnight
But is there a chance, she’ll break our romance
Can it be me
If we could agree, I’m crying

Chorus:
But I don’t know why, she doesn’t try
She has everything, how can I make her stay
I gave her my hand, does she understand
Or is she gonna just throw my heart away
She doesn’t try, my, my

Verse 2:
She tells me to just stick around
Maybe I’m just her fav’rite clown
She always says I need to be there
It’s like I’m just in her hair
But still there’s a chance she’ll end our romance
Maybe it’s me
Could we just agree, I’m trying

Chorus:
But I don’t know why, she doesn’t try
She has everything, how can I make her stay
I gave her my hand, does she understand
Or is she gonna just throw my heart away
She doesn’t try, my, my

(Musical break)

Bridge:
Wish she’d tell me, my heart’s in tears
If she’d just make it clear
Seems so unfair
Will she see the light, save our love affair

Coda:
But I don’t know why, she doesn’t try, pleases make a decision
I don’t know why, she doesn’t try, can we try to end this division
Not find a way to toss my heart away
If she’d just try...

© 2020 Charles M Anderson



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 Posted: Sun Aug 2nd, 2020 06:48 pm
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It does get bluesy at times. Just needs music



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 Posted: Sun Aug 2nd, 2020 10:47 pm
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Hey, MAS... I wrote the lyrics to the music, but the composer didn’t follow through with the singing or any collaboration. It’s pop/jazz with a bit of blues, mostly jazz though. I’m learning to be more selective with composers. Amateur composers don’t seem to collaboration too well.

Charles



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 Posted: Mon Aug 3rd, 2020 01:33 am
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Looks pretty solid Charles.

Not keen on the "division" rhyme, but the rest looks in good nick.

I agree with you that jazz feels a better fit than blues for this one.



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 Posted: Mon Aug 3rd, 2020 07:08 am
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Thanks, RD Man, glad you like it! I decided to not let the division decision divide us. Peace...

Charles



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