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 Posted: Sat Jun 13th, 2020 04:32 pm
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Hello all, hope you are safe and well!

I have this song that I just finished but I can't seem to come up with a title that I'm happy with and I would love to hear your suggestions....and of course what you think of the song itself.

As usual the lyrics are posted below and on the SC page.
Thanks very much for the listen and the help.

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Untitled Song
Words and Music by
Dominick B. Giarraputo
Copyright © 2020

Verse 1:
You don’t believe me when I tell you
You’re the one that I adore
While you run around and treat me like a fool
Still I couldn’t love you more

Verse 2:
You tell your friends that it’s hopeless
And you won’t give me a chance
You say I couldn’t love you the way I say I do
And It sounds too good to be true

Chorus:
All I need is just one chance to prove my love for you
I’ll always try real hard to make you glad
If you give me that chance I’ll show you true romance
Together we can make our dreams come true

Verse 2 again:
You tell your friends that it’s hopeless
And you won’t give me a chance
You say I couldn’t love you the way I say I do
And It sounds too good to be true

Chorus:
All I need is just one chance to prove my love for you
I’ll always try real hard to make you glad
If you give me that chance I’ll show you true romance
Together we can make our dreams come true

If you give me that chance I’ll show you true romance
Together we can make our dreams come true.

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Opps, hit the wrong button and can't delete! my mistake!

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Maybe a bit of a cop out but 'You Dont Believe Me' would be my choice. Lovely song. Great guitar and smooth vocals - lead and backing. I really like this stuff. Well done as always.:)

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"If you give me that chance I’ll show you true romance"

If you will take a chance to believe in true romance...

"A Chance To Believe" :)



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I like "Give me the Chance"

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One Chance

I think that's the BIG idea here.

The title should be, One Chance.

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Thanks guys, this helps!

Okay, so far we've got....

You Dont Believe Me
A Chance To Believe
Give me the Chance
One Chance


1 with "believe" in the title
and 3 with "chance" in the title.

I think something to do with chance is edging out it front, sorry Chris! But you know my first thought was "you don't believe me" as well so I got edge out too! So is there some unwritten rule that the title has to come from the chorus of the song? Doesn't matter to me though, I can go either way.


I'm going to wait a bit longer and see if anyone else chimes in.

Thanks for the kudo's on the song itself. Glad you liked it!



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Call it 'Pachyderm'!!:laugh

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How about "Dromedary, my camel of love?"


OR...."I fell in love with the ash-blond temptress with a platinum smile"!...Oh, woe is me! ;)

You're too cool!

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Ha Ha!!:bigsmile

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It obvious......."Just One Chance"
Pretty good, man........vintage 60's sound, and a real winner!!
Good fun.......and thanks for the little challenge.

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All I Need (Just One Chance)

Good song. Love the old sound. Reminds me a bit of something from Grease.



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I'm with Tom: "Just One Chance"
It's there in the chorus where it should be, and repeated elsewhere in the song.



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Okay, let's recap:

You Dont Believe Me
A Chance To Believe
Give me the Chance
One Chance
Pachyderm

and 3 for
Just One Chance

Let's let it run a few more days and see what happens.

Thanks again guys! :Excited:

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Yeah, Just One Chance is the one. Though I still love your idea of 'Dromedary, my camel of love'. Ha ha..I might have to steal that one.:Comp_Trash1:

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ChrisPrice wrote:
Yeah, Just One Chance is the one. Though I still love your idea of 'Dromedary, my camel of love'. Ha ha..I might have to steal that one.:Comp_Trash1:

It's all yours, you are more than welcomed to it.:laugh I'm not sure I would be able to pull something like that off but being the clever wordsmith that you are I'm sure whatever you would come up with would be brilliant!:thumbsup


"Camel of Love", what the hell was I thinking???!!!!:shock:

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I guess you missed my suggestion

All I Need (Just One Chance)

I liked Just One Chance in the () since it's sung more in the background throughout the verse. Those are the 2 lines that stuck out the most to me though.



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Beatnick wrote:
I guess you missed my suggestion

All I Need (Just One Chance)

I liked Just One Chance in the () since it's sung more in the background throughout the verse. Those are the 2 lines that stuck out the most to me though.


I did and I apologize! Being an old fart has its disavantages! :shock:
I actually counted it as one of the
3 "just one chance"s.

Sorry, I'll go to bed this evening without my milk and cookies to make up for it!;)

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I really liked this song. I liked the instrumentation and the vocals, and it had some really nice harmonies too. I also thought the lyrics were well-written and heartfelt. For a song title, two options came to mind: "Give Me a Chance" and "Make Our Dreams Come True". However, I have another idea: Maybe you could combine those two titles. The title could be "Give Me A Chance (Make Our Dreams Come True)" or "Make Our Dreams Come True (Give Me a Chance)". Those are just my suggestions, though. Great job!

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Well I think I've narrowed it down to:

"Just one Chance" OR
"All I need is just one Chance"

Wanna vote on it or should I just choose one?

Thanks all, I appreciate your input!!!



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