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 Posted: Wed May 20th, 2020 08:11 pm
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Kayla813
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Insecurity
shows how much you care
insecurity
means you have been there

loved someone so much
lost them
so every person til then
is a threat in

insecurity
shows how much you care
insecurity

you're so scary to me
cos you're just like me
that's why when i look at you
i can't breathe

you make me fall off my feet
isn't that sweet?
i can take the heat
of everyone around
it is you i drown
with this love we found
don't make a sound
the silence is so profound



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 Posted: Thu May 21st, 2020 01:50 am
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Good start here. I particularly like the rhythm of those opening lines. To keep that going you might try:
so every person til then > everyone since then

The "you're so scary" part has a different rhythm, and that's fine as it adds some variation to the song. After that I'd try to get back to the original pattern.

You might try something like:
Insecurity
fall off my feet
ain't that sweet?
i can take the heat

Then perhaps go back to the same pattern as the "you're so scary" part again, before finishing back on "Insecurity". I can imagine that deliberately being quite an abrupt ending rather than trailing away.



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 Posted: Fri May 22nd, 2020 01:08 pm
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Yo, Kayla! How's the weather in Swampscott? :)

"Insecurity
shows how much you care
insecurity
means you have been there"

These opening lines are great!

"loved someone so much
lost them
so every person till then
is a threat in"

Hmmm... What's another way to say "lost them"? Compared to the opening lines "lost them" just doesn't seem as thoughtful.

"you make me fall off my feet
isn't that sweet?
i can take the heat
of everyone around
it is you i drown
with this love we found
don't make a sound
the silence is so profound"

Again, more great lines! A crescendo! These lines have urgency, they seem to be leading to something... but what?

I think you should tally up everything you have here so far into a nice, neat little chorus. What's your overall message? What's this song about? Don't leave us hangin' :)



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 Posted: Fri May 22nd, 2020 11:35 pm
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Kayla813
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Swampscott?! How do youuuu know that? Ha, I moved out of that area a year and 1/2 ago....I miss living on the beach, lol


I wrote this song in 1 minute, It came from my heart after listening to something about insecurity and thankfulness.

It's just how I am feeling these days.

People are very quick to jump and attack people. Insecurity is normal when you love someone. It was a personal experience when I try to make friends with people, but sometimes people either have negative comments or ignore you completely. Making you feel paranoid and insecure and in my case, self sabotage. Losing a lover or in my case 5. Lost them for different reasons. Some for other people, partying, whatever..

So the ones you DO love, you get fearful of the pain and hurt again.

Finding someone that completes you.

Someone you care deeply for & having people give you heat for it. In my case, stating it is okay for people to have controversary. I feel sometimes people make love a game, and try to put out something out in people's heart that is so special. I find it kind of sad, when two people love each other deeply, and certain people try to downsize and destroy it.

I'm stating that I can handle "the heat" because no1 can change my mind, or make me love someone less. I love someone more because of the challenges people throw at innocent people.

Never understood politics or why people can't be happy for people that find happiness & love,

i will NOT let anyone tell me what is right or wrong for me, or let their green eyes try to tear up my soul more than they have already attempted with my last relationship.

Love should NEVER be tested by ANYBODY. It is not a pretty thing, but i will never let anyone destroy or tell me who I should be with or love.



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 Posted: Sat May 23rd, 2020 08:34 am
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Swampscott is my old stomping ground... many years ago ;)

""It's just how I am feeling these days
self sabotage
fearful of the pain
Finding someone that completes you
people make love a game
I can handle "the heat"
never let anyone destroy or tell me who I should be with or love""

Self sabotage, a mirage, a delusion
So many heads telling us what to think
Can't shake this feeling, afraid to be alone
Insane love game, a couple incomplete
But we can't deny the heat



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