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 Posted: Mon May 4th, 2020 07:42 am
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Should a listened to mama
© 2020 Owen Hovenden

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Verse 1:
Storm clouds brewing on my back porch
Thunder rumblin, bitchin and grumbling
Tempers flare like a blowtorch
The blues tattooed on your shoulders and arms

Chorus 1:
Men ain't nothing but walking trouble
A child of sorrow and vice
You should a listened to mama baby
Kept them outa your life

Verse 2:
Your daddy left before you was born
He was a rambler, drinker and gambler
Weren't sorry to see him gone
Spent my money, squandered my love

Chorus 2:
Men ain't nothing but walking trouble
A child of heartache and strife
You should a listened to mama baby
Mama knows what it's like

Bridge:
I gotta baseball bat at the back door
Carving knife in my kitchen drawer
No smooth talkin liar with a sinful desire
Slip past me or set a foot in the door

Verse 3:
Hush now child you're safe and warm
Here in mama's arms keep you safe from harm
There's an end to every storm,
Hold your head up high, baby don't you cry

Chorus 3:
Men ain't nothing but walking trouble
A child of struggle and spite
You should a listened to mama baby
Take my advice

Coda:
You should a listened to mama baby
Keep them outa your life



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 Posted: Tue May 5th, 2020 11:07 am
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This is a great song Owen. I especially like the chord progressions and the lyrics work really well. Nothing I can criticise about this. I really like it.:)

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Thanks Chris! Appreciate the listen and the positive feedback :)



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Another really good song Owen. Some great guitar licks and tone you got going on here.
I like the dark lyrics. Especially your bridge. That part in particular gave me the chills.



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Thanks Sam! Yes, this is more your mama bear ready to tear strips off someone.



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Oh, so this is where everybody's hiding...

Sweet chords RDM! Don't tell me how you're playing that, I'll probably steal'em ;)



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Well chords belong to everyone. :) If you are interested I can share them.



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Tell ya' what... would you be interested in a drum track and a re-mix? :)



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By all means. What do you need?



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Just trax :)

I've got windows onedrive and a soundclick accnt (free mp3 or WAV downloads with soundclick's free account, very convenient) how about you?



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Cool. Below are the tracks I used rendered as .WAV files. BPM=115

Link to tracks:
https://drive.google.com/drive/folders/1Z100WNIp6W05ghxcFVPCBf7pqm9RyelK?usp=sharing



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What'cha think?

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You work quickly! I think you have the style right - minimalist on the beat and using the drums more for accenting things. That's the sort of thing I would have gone for myself. I particularly like the heavy drums at the end of the bridge.

In terms of mix, I would probably have the guitar a bit more forward - but this version is about how you would put it together so there should be differences there.

I'm not convinced that drums are necessary, but I like what you've done with them :)



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Well... I was actually hoping the drums would inspire you to re-think your bass :)



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Did you want to take a crack at that?



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Or did you mean remove it entirely? If so then I worry about the guitar being all high notes. With a capo on the 4th fret (to suit my vocal range) I thought it sounded a bit tinny without some deeper notes. The drums provide some depth in the lower frequencies but it's not exactly the same thing.



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Lol... NO. That would put far too much of ME into this. As soon as I heard it I just wanted to throw those drums at it, but if you're not "feeling it" that's cool. :)



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