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 Posted: Sun Apr 19th, 2020 06:05 pm
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RainbowKeeper
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Sometimes

A starry night the wind is blowing
Windows wide open my voice unheard
While my thoughts are flying through the night
They are flying like a little bird
Remembering all the good and bad times
I reflect on all my dreams and fears
Everything I know and all I’ve learned
On memory lane through days and years

Everyone knows all the pain and tears
Which follow if a heart was broken
Everyone knows the wounds and sorrows
If emotions remain unspoken
Don’t feel discouraged open your heart
Don’t be sad just hold your head up high
Take a deep breath and open your eyes
And then you’ll see the whole starry sky

Sometimes
I think you know
Sometimes
If the night seems to have no end
Sometimes
I think you know
If the endless echo seems to be your only friend
And you try to apprehend
Sometimes
If the night has no end

If a tear reaches the ground
A new rose will grow
If a tear reaches the ground
When your faith is getting low
If a tear reaches the ground
A new rose will grow
And a new hope begins to glow

Everyone knows all the pain and tears
Which follow if a heart was broken
Everyone knows the wounds and sorrows
-If words aren’t easy to find-
If emotions remain unspoken

29.03.07/reworked 19.04.20
© by Ian P.
For: FPeee.../Valentine+B

Feel free to give some helpful comments and feedback.
Tyvm
RK

Last edited on Sun Apr 19th, 2020 06:07 pm by RainbowKeeper



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 Posted: Wed Apr 22nd, 2020 06:24 pm
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Hi RK, Another emotional piece here. The first 2 verses are nice. One thing that caught me up was in V1 you mention good and bad times, but V2 pretty much speaks of the hard times (and then offers hopefulness). I would consider sticking to talking about the hard times. just to demonstrate, remembering all the good times that turned bad, I reflect on lost dreams and fears. Or something like that.

I just loved the last 2 lines of V2. Made me smile :)

I know we tend to write very differently, and you usually have a tune already in mind - so feel free to ignore what I hear in my mind here:

Sometimes
The night has no end
Sometimes
The endless echo seems to be your only friend
Sometimes
You grapple to apprehend
Sometimes
The night has no end

I love the sentiment, but I am not sure I understand the part about tears. It seems like you are saying crying will make you feel better?



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 Posted: Wed Apr 22nd, 2020 06:32 pm
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Hello Andrea,
You are right about the meaning of the c-part. Crying seems to be a way to let go of strain you carry around with you.
I do see your point in the verses.
And I will think of your „arrangement“ of the B part.
Ty for this feedback.

RK



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