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 Posted: Sat Apr 18th, 2020 03:05 pm
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RainbowKeeper
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Heyho,
Once again I brushed up an „oldie“. Maybe you can relate, maybe not, but feel free to leave comments and feedback.

Yours
RK

Windows

May it’s all my fault and madness
And may I’m wrong all along
But I’m running, I run and run
And I don’t know where I belong
They call me insane and hopeless
A river that won’t reach the sea
But all I try is reach myself
And follow what’s inside of me

Is it a lack of self-esteem?
Is it all just a childish fear?
I don’t know how to break this strain
Are all these sorrows worth a tear?
Fooled myself or been fooled by you?
My heart is caged my soul not free
I can’t believe in what I feel
There’s so much noise inside of me

Open the windows
Open the doors
Open the windows
Let fresh air and sunlight in
Open the windows
Open the doors
Don’t just stare through the glas
Being happy is not a sin

Ain’t it time
To kiss this all goodbye
Ain’t it time
To give it one more try
Ain’t it time
To kiss this all goodbye
Let me follow my own lead
Open the windows
And let me try to fly

Fooled myself or been fooled by you
My heart is caged my soul not free
But I know I wanna be loved
I wanna be able to see


13.07.13/reworked 18.04.20
© by Ian P.
For: Valentine+B



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 Posted: Sun Apr 26th, 2020 12:28 am
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This is very introspective. I would be interested to hear it with music.

Here are some thoughts to use or lose:

Maybe it’s my fault or madness
maybe I've been wrong all along
But I’m running, I run and run
And I don’t know where I belong
They can call me insane and hopeless
A river that won’t reach the sea
I try is reach the depths within
And follow what’s inside of me

Open the windows
Open the door
Open the windows
Let fresh air and sunlight in
Open the windows
Open the doors
Don’t just stare through the glass
Being happy is not a sin


Is it a lack of self-esteem?
Is it all just a childish fear?
I don’t know how to break this strain
I don't know how to stop the tears?
Fooled myself or been fooled by you?
My heart is caged my soul not free
I can’t believe in what I feel
There’s so much noise inside of me

Open the windows
Open the doors
Open the windows
Let fresh air and sunlight in
Open the windows
Open the doors
Don’t just stare through the glass
Being happy is not a sin

Ain’t it time
To kiss this all goodbye
Ain’t it time
To give it one more try
Ain’t it time
To kiss this all goodbye
Let me follow my own lead
Open the windows
And let me try to fly

Fooled myself or been fooled by you
My heart is caged my soul not free
But I know I wanna be loved
I wanna be able to see



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 Posted: Sun Apr 26th, 2020 09:25 am
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Hey miss A,
Thanks for your feedback!
I will have a closer look at your lines when I’m fully awake lol.
Hope to read a new one from you soon.
I dunno what it is but atm I myself, am very productive....once again.

Tyvm
RK



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 Posted: Thu Apr 30th, 2020 01:00 am
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Good job RK.

Lots of emotion: angst and self-doubt, but also hope and self-love and I particularly like the permission to be happy.

I suspect this would resonate with many a youth or those that remember a similar period in their lives.

I would also suggest May > Maybe

Nice write!



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 Posted: Thu Apr 30th, 2020 01:23 am
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Ty for your feedback rdm!

I will check it out in the morning. Can’t focus anymore. Way to late.

Cheerio
RK



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