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 Posted: Tue Mar 10th, 2020 07:24 pm
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cmaja
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When I hit upon the title in the middle of the night, I could barely sleep —lines keep running through my brain. I wrote it quickly this morning. CMA

I Apologize For Loving You
____________Verse/Chorus

Verse 1:
All the tears I cried to be with you
And all my tries, no follow through
I guess our love isn’t meant to be
I’ll take my leave, pray you agree

Chorus:
And I apologize for loving you
Please remember my love as true
But love works out or breaks apart
Sometimes it leaves broken hearts
So, I apologize for loving you

Verse 2:
Dreams and memories don’t fade away
You stay on my mind everyday
I know you must go, I’ll dry my tears
Every night you’ll be in my prayers

Chorus:
And I apologize for loving you
Please remember my love as true
But love works out or breaks apart
Sometimes it leaves broken hearts
So, I apologize for loving you

Bridge:
May your days be full of cheer
Everyday better than before
Hope your heart stays young through the years
And love guides you forevermore

Chorus:
And I apologize for loving you
Please remember my love as true
But love works out or breaks apart
Sometimes it leaves broken hearts
So, I apologize for loving you

Post Chorus:
I apologize for loving you
I apologize for loving you
For loving you
For loving you... ou, ou, ou
For loving... you

© 2020 Charles M Anderson

Last edited on Wed Apr 1st, 2020 06:30 am by cmaja



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 Posted: Tue Mar 31st, 2020 05:22 pm
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I rewrote this lyric. Hope it’s better now.

Charles



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 Posted: Wed Apr 1st, 2020 01:13 am
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Hey charles,

Just read your piece and I have to say that I like it a lot! Specially because you didn’t came up with cliches. It a strong thing that can stand on it s own. Personally I have just 2 or 3 very little things that I d like to show you, so that you get some feedback! It already is a great piece!

Yours RK

I Apologize For Loving You
____________Verse/Chorus

Verse 1:
All the tears I cried to be with you
And all my tries, no follow through
I guess our love isn’t meant to be
I’ll take my leave, pray you agree

Chorus:
And I apologize for loving you
Please remember my love as true
I won’t forget the things you said < I’d skip that line, seems to much
Love works out or breaks apart and
Sometimes it leaves broken hearts
So, I apologize for loving you

Verse 2:
Dreams and memories don’t fade away
You stay on my mind everyday
I know you must go, I’ll dry my tears
Every night you’ll be in my prayers < what about the rhyme here?

Chorus:
And I apologize for loving you
Please remember my love as true
I won’t forget the things you said
Love works out or breaks apart and
Sometimes it leaves broken hearts
So, I apologize for loving you

Bridge:
May all your days be full of cheer
Everyday much better than before
Hope your heart stays young through the years
With love to guide you forevermore < I’d keep this one shorter
„May love guide you forevermore“
...something like that. Feels more
Direct and stronger.

Chorus:
And I apologize for loving you
Please remember my love as true
I won’t forget the things you said
Love works out or breaks apart and
Sometimes it leaves broken hearts
So, I apologize for loving you

Post Chorus:
I apologize for loving you
I apologize for loving you
For loving you
For loving you... ou, ou, ou
For loving... you

© 2020 Charles M Anderson
Last edited on Tue Mar 31st, 2020 09:03 pm by cmaja



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 Posted: Wed Apr 1st, 2020 06:37 am
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Thanks, RK, for your review and suggestions. I shortened the chorus and tightened the bridge. Tears and prayers are near rhymes, so I left them as is. Sincerely,

Charles



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