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 Posted: Sun Mar 1st, 2020 10:54 pm
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LongShadows
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I'm pretty sure the lines are interchangeable and that there's more to. Come.

Now that yet another crisis
Has gone spread acrost the land
You're clutching your devices
Like they're stapled to your hands

You have all the information
That you need for this decision
You've been told a hundred times
But ain't nobody listening

Don't shoot the messenger

The fabric of community
is strategically unravelled
As the monuments to liberty
are slowly ground into gravel

Civility is gone beyond
the point of no return
When the voice of reason is the one
that says just let it burn

Don't shoot the messenger

Anything's a crisis if
It garners enough wealth
But after the commercials
they'll be on to something else

The profits made by those who are
The first to break the news
Are so obscene there's no reward
In waiting for the truth

Don't shoot the messenger

Lots more, I think

Gregg Barrett



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 Posted: Mon Mar 2nd, 2020 12:08 am
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Hey there,
I find this lyrics very interesting!
Still trying to get all the images out.
Just wanted to say real quick, what made me frown a little:

But ain't nobody listening < maybe I just don’t get it, but somehow it feels a little out of the picture. „Seems nobody is listening“ would make more sense to me. Specially if I combine it with the line before.

strategically < seems to be a very difficult word for a song. While reading I had to start twice to fully get it. So maybe you find a word that is less „complicated“.

That is all from me.
I‘m sure I read it once again, it’s a good piece u have here.

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 Posted: Mon Mar 2nd, 2020 09:02 pm
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Hey Gregg, Yes, keep it going! I love it. It is well written, fun, interesting and I would keep reading if there were more verses.



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 Posted: Wed Apr 8th, 2020 01:10 am
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Just realized I haven't touched this since it became relevant. Could be ten verses in the last three weeks



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