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I Would’ve Fallen
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 Posted: Tue Feb 18th, 2020 12:10 pm
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M.P. Dudash
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Had You taken that first step and said you want me(2s)
Had you opened up your heart to let me in(3 Syllables/3s)
Where would we be then, but on a journey till the end
Yes I..I.. I.... would’ve fallen

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I would’ve fallen(3s)...
I would’ve fallen...
Yes I..I.. I... would’ve fallen

V2
Why fight forever when it’s standing there before us
Why make the other doubt what we already know(3s)
When you turned around to go, I was dealt a heavy blow
Cause I..I..I..would’ve fallen

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I would’ve fallen(3s)...
I would’ve fallen...
Yes I..I..I... would’ve fallen

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I’m sitting here try’n to fool myself
By putting feelings that been set free back on the shelf(3s)
It’s anything but fun, not having what I want
When my heart has already gone all in


I would’ve fallen..
I would’ve fallen..
Yes I..I..I. would’ve fallen................

Yes I..I..I.. would’ve..fallen

Copyright © Michael P. Dudash 2/18/2020

Last edited on Mon May 25th, 2020 02:55 pm by M.P. Dudash



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 Posted: Tue Feb 18th, 2020 04:36 pm
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Hey M.P., This terrific. I love the "I would have fallen". I just love the way it is drawn out - beautiful.

The only thing I would look at is the tense in V2. I think it would make more sense if it was past tense rather than present.



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 Posted: Tue Feb 18th, 2020 04:47 pm
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I’ll look into it, thank you!



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Feels like classic country!
I like the "I would have fallen" line too

You might look at:
Had you ...
If you'd ...
just to mix it up a bit, but not a biggie.
You might prefer the exact repetition to match the 2 x Why in V2.



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 Posted: Thu Feb 20th, 2020 11:51 am
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Thanls Owen, that is something I will look into as well.



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Such a great song! It reminds me of "On A Bus to St. Cloud" by Trisha Yearwood!



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