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 Posted: Mon Feb 10th, 2020 01:17 am
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2020 6 You comfort me
by James Conrad © 2020

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You’re my front porch partner
Sipping summer sun tea
Deep breath of jasmine hangs in the air
The universe ends here

Ch
You, You comfort me
And my soul’s at rest
Lay my head on your chest
Feel your breathing in and out next to me
You, You comfort me

You’re my fireside friend
While the north wind blows
My fingers rest on the small of your back
Wrapped in red flannel sheets

ch

You’re my morning coffee lover
Blow a kiss out the door
The gate may creak; need a coat of paint
We’ve weathered many storms

ch
You, You comfort me



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 Posted: Sat Feb 15th, 2020 04:05 pm
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James, what a beautiful little song! Very simple but it says so much. I like it very much. Production wise..there isn't anything I hear that needs to be changed. Clean and clear just the way I like them. Your vocal performance it right on target, and I love the guitar work.

Thanks for sharing. Enjoyed it very much.



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 Posted: Sun Feb 16th, 2020 06:01 am
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Thanks for the listen and feedback, Moptop :D

I wrote and sang the song, but can't take credit on the gtr/instruments (Band in a Box 2020).

Cheers.

James

Last edited on Sun Feb 16th, 2020 06:02 am by jamestoffee



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Lovely bouncy tune! And it feels homely and comforting so fits well with the lyric, especially the chorus.

Not sure about the chord choice on "hangs in the air". Is that a Dmin? Maybe a major again like C instead?

It tells its story simply and sweetly and just works.
I like it :)



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 Posted: Tue Feb 18th, 2020 10:14 am
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Thanks for the listen and feedback, Owen.

I use C major a lot in the chorus (and verse) already, but thanks for offering an alternative.

Em..................G.........Dm............Am
Deep breath of jasmine hangs in the air

-James

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 Posted: Fri Feb 28th, 2020 06:51 pm
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I really enjoyed this James. Great vocals including some nice harmonies. I like the way the arrangement develops too..not overcooked..just enough to build the song. Very nice.:)

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 Posted: Fri Feb 28th, 2020 11:34 pm
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Thanks for the listen and feedback, Chris :D



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