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Wrote this for Dave a few weeks ago... Haven’t heard from him yet. Hope he likes it. CMA

Will You Return
Music: Dave Strumfeld, Lyrics: Charles M Anderson © 2020
_________________Verse/Chorus

Verse 1: (00:00-00:35)
(00:00-00:11) No one sees the love locked in me, dear, since you left me here by myself
(00:12-00:23) No one sees my heart’s misery, dear, and my hopes are left on a shelf
(00:24-00:29) You left me here forlorn in tears
(00:30-00:35) Will you return

Chorus: (00:36-00:59)
(00:36-00:40) So will you return to see our love through
(00:41-00:45) Since you are the joyful part of me
(00:46-00:53) So will you return to make love new
(00:53-00:57) And try to mend this broken heart in me

Verse 2: (00:59-01:34)
(00:59-01:10) No one sees I’m lost in the mist, dear, can’t find my way back to my home
(01:11-01:22) No one sees the love that I miss, dear, I stumble through life on my own
(01:23-01:28) Please hear my cry don’t let love die
(01:29-01:34) Will you return

Chorus: (01:34-01:57)
(01:34-01:38) So will you return to see our love through
(01:39-01:43) Since you are the joyful part of me
(01:44-01:51) So will you return to make love new
(01:51-01:55) And try to mend this broken heart in me

Bridge: (01:57-02:21)
(01:57-02:03) I was wrong to try your love
(02:04-02:10) Please hear this cry for your love
(02:10-02:16) ‘Cause we belong together, my love

Chorus: (02:22-02:45)
(02:22-02:27) So will you return to see our love through
(02:27-02:32) Since you are the joyful part of me
(02:33-02:40) So will you return to make love new
(02:40-02:45) And try to mend this broken heart in me

Post Chorus: (02:45-02:55)
(02:45-02:50) Will you return to make love new
(02:50-02:55) Finally mend this broken heart in me

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Hi

Got this recorded yet?

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Billy_Lunch_Money wrote:
Hi

Got this recorded yet?


I sent it to the composer. Haven’t heard anything from him.

Charles

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Hi Charles, This is sad and sweet. I am trying to find the tune for the music. I am feeling soft, but was wondering what you had in mind?

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Hey, Andrea... The music is already done but no vocals. The verses and bridge are soft and slow, whereas the chorus is a quicker and more upbeat.

Charles

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That seems like a good fit. Hope it all comes together easily :)


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