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2020 #5 Love Divine all loves excelling
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 Posted: Sun Feb 2nd, 2020 09:55 am
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2020 5 Love Divine all loves excelling
by James Conrad © 2020

https://soundcloud.com/jamestoffee/2020-5-love-divine-all-loves-excelling

Jesus the image of God invisible; firstborn over all creation
All things in heaven and earth were created through Him and for Him
There’s a crack in the concrete where new life begins

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Love Divine, all loves excelling according to plan
Love Divine, all loves excelling
All loves
All loves

Rulers, or powers, or thrones, or authorities; visible and invisible
All things in heaven and earth were created through Him and for Him
There’s a crack in the concrete where new life begins

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He is before all, and in Him all hold together
The head of the body, the church
The firstborn among the dead

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All loves

Last edited on Thu Feb 13th, 2020 11:34 am by jamestoffee



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 Posted: Thu Feb 6th, 2020 01:04 am
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You have a knack for a melody. I found this very engaging musically.

I like this line:
There’s a crack in the concrete where new life begins
that's nice! Very visual as well as meaningful.

To be honest, the rest of the lyric didn't grab me.
It kind of slid past me without grabbing my attention.
But as a non-believer I might not be the best person to judge on that!



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 Posted: Thu Feb 6th, 2020 02:03 am
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You have a knack for a melody. I found this very engaging musically.
Thanks, Owen :D

I like this line:
There’s a crack in the concrete where new life begins
that's nice! Very visual as well as meaningful.
To be honest, the rest of the lyric didn't grab me.
It kind of slid past me without grabbing my attention.

Thanks for the confirmation. I took the concept of the verses from a section of the Bible. The verses from the Bible are almost all abstract nouns vs. concrete nouns, so I tried to add concrete nouns (and literally added ‘concrete’)....although it's not spelled out, it was meant to represent man via manmade things.....and God can still do what He wants (excelling love) to grow new life in unliving thing (man in his sin nature).
Now that I’ve finished and posted the song, I looked at the original lyrics and see they used the concrete nouns: heart, crown, breast, temples
https://www.hymnal.net/en/hymn/h/358

But as a non-believer I might not be the best person to judge on that!
No worries. I appreciate you taking the time to critique nonetheless.



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 Posted: Tue Feb 11th, 2020 10:30 pm
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Very pleasant sound overall. Two suggestions. Instead of "in heaven and on earth..." maybe just "in heaven and earth...". Those little things can often make it easier to sing. Also, coming out of the bridge, you could use the same lift (chord pattern) that you use at the end of each verse. Maybe bring it all together a bit more.

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 Posted: Thu Feb 13th, 2020 11:37 am
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Thank you, Janke.

Both suggestions are helpful and I agree with the changes, and will make them on future versions of this song.

I'm a bit caught up on other projects at the moment, so even if I don't post an updated version, the suggestions are noted and accepted.

Thanks again!

James



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