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 Posted: Sun Jan 26th, 2020 08:52 am
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Been writing lyrics to music quite a bit this month but I managed to complete a few a few without, like this one. CMA

Cone Of Confusion
___________________Verse/Chorus

Verse 1:
She whispers in his ear things he longs to hear
She tells his friends just how much she loves him
But motives are unclear, hidden in a cloud above him
Will he fall for her schemes, see the nightmare of her dreams
And exit from the mist in which she shoved him

Chorus:
He seeks her secret soul
He thinks he has control
But he’s been swept deep in her illusion
He didn’t see his love for her
Would turn his life into a blur
He’s caught within the cone of confusion

Verse 2:
She gathers up his hopes, says they must elope
Eludes his friends so she can constrain him
But is her love a hoax that will eventually just pain him
He’s trapped within her snare and he’s webbed and unaware
Of the many tricks she’ll use to contain him

Chorus:
He seeks her secret soul
He thinks he has control
But he’s been swept deep in her illusion
He didn’t see his love for her
Would turn his life into a blur
He’s caught within the cone of confusion

Bridge:
If she’d just come clean of what her intentions really are
And let the rain wash away the stains within her heart
Maybe there’s a chance this blossoming romance
Will flower into something so much more

Alt. Bridge:
Will the illusions she’s enwrapped him in
And the end result of her secret sins
Be the cause of a failed affair
Or can she keep him unaware of the chaos he’s in

Chorus:
He seeks her secret soul
He thinks he has control
But he’s been swept deep in her illusion
He didn’t see his love for her
Would turn his life into a blur
He’s caught within the cone of confusion

Post Chorus:
He’s caught within the cone of confusion
Yes, caught within the cone of confusion

© 2020 Charles M Anderson

Last edited on Tue Feb 4th, 2020 02:07 am by cmaja



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 Posted: Wed Jan 29th, 2020 10:28 pm
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Hi

Of late, I've been writing lyrics to chord progressions I come up with. Since I'm originally a guitarist I suppose that's how it works for me, there are many other ways to write and whatever helps is good!

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Yea, Billy. My right brain constructs lyrics in all kinda twisted ways... But my left brain keeps everything in check and orderly. Balance is the key.

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yup! I find they write themselves. Its gotta come from somewhere.



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Yeah, I like this a lot. I like the nature of something wicked going on that he is unaware of, yet part of. I was disappointed in the bridge that it seemed so normal (that she is not wicked). I wanted something more sinister.



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Andrea wrote:
Yeah, I like this a lot. I like the nature of something wicked going on that he is unaware of, yet part of. I was disappointed in the bridge that it seemed so normal (that she is not wicked). I wanted something more sinister.

Hey, Andrea... There’s little chance she’s gonna change. It’s just me hoping. Her modus operandi will remain the same till she gets hit by a freight train. Maybe I’ll do an alt. bridge.

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Sorry, I had too re-read it again... a little too close to home the first time around for me. But that's song writing I guess. It is supposed to strike a chord with the listener.

What style of music are you thinking of because I get the feeling it should like an acoustic song in own rights.



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Andrea wrote:
Yeah, I like this a lot. I like the nature of something wicked going on that he is unaware of, yet part of. I was disappointed in the bridge that it seemed so normal (that she is not wicked). I wanted something more sinister.

Okay Andrea, I added an alt. bridge keeping her sinister.

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Hi Charles, I am liking it. I think I am getting caught up in your lyrics. I was kind of hoping the bridge would make clear who she is or what her intensions are. I see her as a black widow with definite cruel intensions. I kind of get a Zeppelin feel? Not sure exactly.



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Thanks, Andrea... I thought you’d like the alt. bridge. Yea, she’ll probably rip him up pretty bad. Zeppelin... maybe, if only. Glad you like it!

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Billy_Lunch_Money wrote:
Sorry, I had too re-read it again... a little too close to home the first time around for me. But that's song writing I guess. It is supposed to strike a chord with the listener.

What style of music are you thinking of because I get the feeling it should like an acoustic song in own rights.


Hopefully it didn’t hit so close to home whereas you’re getting flashbacks or emotional turmoil. I don’t want listeners to use a stricken chord to hang themselves...

Yea, acoustics may work but I’m thinking electric, good solid rock with plenty of tension. Especially if the alt. bridge is used.

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