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 Posted: Sat Dec 21st, 2019 01:41 pm
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Tekboy
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THE GAME

 

You tell me you love me baby
So why does it hurt
The better I love you baby

The more you treat me like dirt
I'm getting real tired
Of talking it over
Maybe it's time that we both
Find another lover
 
(Chorus)

Because
I know you think us men are all the same
Just a credit card
Or a way to change your name
And I know you like to think
That I'm the only one to blame
Well, I hate to tell you baby
You just lost the game
Cause I won't play this game
 
You played with my heart now baby
And I got burned
You say you want me back now (but you know)
The table's been turned
I don't even want to try
To talk it over
While you were out there losing
I found another lover
 
Chorus
 
Yeah you just lost the game
You just lost the game
 
 
Words and music Ray Joseph Feller and Sheldon Reed Shaw
All rights Reserved thru BMI

Last edited on Sat Dec 21st, 2019 08:07 pm by Tekboy



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 Posted: Sat Dec 21st, 2019 01:45 pm
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I cannot get this to maintain proper formatting. I will paste it from a Word document after I get back from Christmas shopping. Stay tuned.
Edit: That was successful. :)

Last edited on Sat Dec 21st, 2019 08:07 pm by Tekboy



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 Posted: Sat Dec 21st, 2019 11:54 pm
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I like your theme, and it definitely has attitude and mood!
"The Game" is a great metaphor to work with.

Some sugs for your consideration:
I know you think us men are all the same > I know you think men are all the same
You just lost the game > You just lost again (just to avoid using 'game' twice in 2 lines)
The table's been turned > The tables 've been turned
While you were out there losing > While you were out there playing



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 Posted: Sun Dec 22nd, 2019 02:32 pm
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I agree with RainydayMan- this piece has good attitude and I really like the lyrics. I am already imagining a melody in a blues style whilst reading the lyrics in my head!
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 Posted: Mon Dec 23rd, 2019 06:44 pm
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If you guys want, I can shoot a flip video after I put new strings on my guitar. :)
It is basically a minor progression on the verses, and then a bluesy major progression on the chorus. I have performed this to all demographics so far, and it has gone over really well. Teenagers even dance to it. :)

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 Posted: Mon Dec 23rd, 2019 06:53 pm
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RainyDayMan wrote: I like your theme, and it definitely has attitude and mood!
"The Game" is a great metaphor to work with.

Some sugs for your consideration:
I know you think us men are all the same > I know you think men are all the same
You just lost the game > You just lost again (just to avoid using 'game' twice in 2 lines)
The table's been turned > The tables 've been turned
While you were out there losing > While you were out there playing

I am just going to have to let y'all hear it. :)



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