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Tekboy
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THE GAME You tell me you love me baby
So why does it hurt
The better I love you baby
The more you treat me like dirt
I'm getting real tired
Of talking it over
Maybe it's time that we both
Find another lover
(Chorus)
Because
I know you think us men are all the same
Just a credit card
Or a way to change your name
And I know you like to think
That I'm the only one to blame
Well, I hate to tell you baby
You just lost the game
Cause I won't play this game
You played with my heart now baby
And I got burned
You say you want me back now (but you know)
The table's been turned
I don't even want to try
To talk it over
While you were out there losing
I found another lover
Chorus
Yeah you just lost the game
You just lost the game
Words and music Ray Joseph Feller and Sheldon Reed Shaw
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Last edited on Sat Dec 21st, 2019 08:07 pm by Tekboy
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| Posted: Sat Dec 21st, 2019 01:45 pm |
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I cannot get this to maintain proper formatting. I will paste it from a Word document after I get back from Christmas shopping. Stay tuned.
Edit: That was successful. 
Last edited on Sat Dec 21st, 2019 08:07 pm by Tekboy
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| Posted: Sat Dec 21st, 2019 11:54 pm |
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I like your theme, and it definitely has attitude and mood!
"The Game" is a great metaphor to work with.
Some sugs for your consideration:
I know you think us men are all the same > I know you think men are all the same
You just lost the game > You just lost again (just to avoid using 'game' twice in 2 lines)
The table's been turned > The tables 've been turned
While you were out there losing > While you were out there playing
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| Posted: Sun Dec 22nd, 2019 02:32 pm |
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If you guys want, I can shoot a flip video after I put new strings on my guitar.
It is basically a minor progression on the verses, and then a bluesy major progression on the chorus. I have performed this to all demographics so far, and it has gone over really well. Teenagers even dance to it.
Last edited on Mon Dec 23rd, 2019 06:47 pm by Tekboy
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| Posted: Mon Dec 23rd, 2019 06:53 pm |
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RainyDayMan wrote: I like your theme, and it definitely has attitude and mood!
"The Game" is a great metaphor to work with.
Some sugs for your consideration:
I know you think us men are all the same > I know you think men are all the same
You just lost the game > You just lost again (just to avoid using 'game' twice in 2 lines)
The table's been turned > The tables 've been turned
While you were out there losing > While you were out there playing
I am just going to have to let y'all hear it.
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| Posted: Mon Feb 14th, 2022 12:26 pm |
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I just noticed your post, and yes I know it's over a year old. Nicely written, good indictment of a 'love gone wrong'
Suggestions:
"I know you think all guys are the same"
"Just walking credit cards"
"'Cuz I won't play your game"Last edited on Mon Feb 14th, 2022 12:31 pm by SongWriterJoe
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