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 Posted: Tue Dec 17th, 2019 05:44 am
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Mistress Whiskey-Mike Dudash and Kellie Niederhelman

Mistress Whiskey
V1
If desperation and despair
Were my hair of the dog I’d be fine
When the amber of the bottle comes calling
My Heaven and hell are combined
Though she won’t say she loves me
I can’t help but see all the signs
It ain't cause I miss her, that she’s made me a fixture
On the same damn barstool each night

CH
She’s just my…. (my 3 syllables)
Secret love
Her cravings seduce me, they run through my blood
She’s my hidden addiction, an abusive crutch
It's no mystery why
She's my one true love
(Pause)
Mistress Whiskey

V2
A victim from a very young age
On Christmas Eve, the Reaper, took mom away
Too many times she gave up on life
Used and abused, manipulated inside
Tihenone day her love set her free...
Mistress Whiskey

CH
She’s just my…. (my 3 syllables)
Secret love
Her cravings seduce me, they run through my blood
She’s my hidden addiction, an abusive crutch
It's no mystery why
She's my one true love
(Pause)
Mistress Whiskey

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Mistress whiskey-how I love you
Mistress whiskey-how I need you
Maybe someday, I’ll get up and leave
Mistress whiskey- won't you please set me free

CH
She’s just my…. (my 3 syllables)
Secret love
Her cravings seduced me, they run through my blood
She’s my hidden addiction, an abusive crutch
I love you,, yet I hate you....so much
(Pause)
Mistress Whiskey

I love you, yet I hate you so much...Mistress Whiskey

Copyright © 12/17/2019 Michael P Dudash/Kellie Niederhelman

Last edited on Tue Dec 17th, 2019 07:16 am by M.P. Dudash



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 Posted: Wed Dec 18th, 2019 09:28 pm
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Another great story.

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 Posted: Thu Dec 19th, 2019 12:22 am
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Thanks Alan



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 Posted: Thu Dec 19th, 2019 08:48 am
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I like the chorus here. That flows nicely.

Verse one feels a bit convoluted to me, it doesn't have that same flow to it.

The bridge is another strong point.
You might consider:
Maybe someday, I’ll get up and leave you
to link it to the prev lines.

Verse 2 and the mother feels too indirect, almost a distraction. In real life of course it would be entirely relevant and a tragedy, but for the song it just seems to change focus unnecessarily.

But the love/hate relationship seems right on.



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 Posted: Thu Dec 19th, 2019 11:05 am
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Looks as though we may have some work left to do. Thanks for the input Owen.



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 Posted: Fri Dec 20th, 2019 06:52 am
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Interesting..



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OMG, sorry I am late on this. I was away for a bit and am catching up (and country comes second-lol).

This is awesome. The only change I can even consider is the last line of the bridge::

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Mistress whiskey-how I love you
Mistress whiskey-how I need you
Maybe someday, I’ll get up and leave
Mistress whiskey- won't you please set me free - but you'll never let me



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 Posted: Fri Feb 7th, 2020 03:02 am
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Andrea, I’m getting mixed reviews on this one and I’m not sure which way to go. Thanks for looking.



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Once again, the Georges, Conway, Merle, etc. could sing this song! Amazing again! 👍



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