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 Posted: Sun Dec 15th, 2019 11:05 pm
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Praise song I wrote a couple of months back

https://soundcloud.com/atxsongs/your-light

Your Light

When the world is dark
And all hope is lost
There's a peace I find
I can see Your light

Your light, Your light, so beautiful, Your light
From the depths and to the greatest heights
Your light, Your light, so precious is Your light
Even in the darkest night
I can see Your light

When I've lost my way
And I've gone astray
You're my faithful guide
I can see Your light

Your light, Your light, so beautiful, Your light
From the depths and to the greatest heights
Your light, Your light, so precious is Your light
Even in the darkest night
I can see Your light

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Your light, Your light, so beautiful, Your light
From the depths and to the greatest heights
Your light, Your light, so precious is Your light
Even in the darkest night
I can see Your light
I can see Your light

Last edited on Tue Dec 17th, 2019 03:56 am by billtexas

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 Posted: Tue Dec 17th, 2019 03:42 am
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The lyric is really nice.

Have you removed the recording?
I couldn't get the link to work.



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 Posted: Tue Dec 17th, 2019 03:57 am
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I edited the link now. Hopefully will work.

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 Posted: Tue Dec 17th, 2019 04:11 am
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Yes, working now. That's lovely! :)



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 Posted: Tue Dec 17th, 2019 04:18 am
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Thanks for listening and for the kind words.

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 Posted: Tue Dec 17th, 2019 12:07 pm
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Nice delivery and production; especially with the arrangement and piano playing.

Since you have 2 verses, consider trying to match their rhyme schemes....

vs1
a
b
c (Assonance rhyme)
c (Assonance rhyme)

vs2
a
a
b (Assonance rhyme)
b (Assonance rhyme)

maybe V1 can rhyme dark with spark

For example

When the world is dark
HOPE GIVES A SPARK
TO a peace I find
I can see Your light


Thanks for sharing.

James



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