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The Cause Of Lightness Is Heat
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 Posted: Mon Dec 2nd, 2019 06:30 pm
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Been working on this the last few days. Got the title from an ancient text. CMA

The Cause Of Lightness Is Heat
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Verse 1:
Against the cold, against the dark
I see a light, a flashing spark
Though night draws me deep in dreams
Awake, asleep or in between
I’ll stir my being, force my heart to beat
Because the cause of lightness is heat

Chorus:
And the heat incinerates my wrongs
And the tarnish of my misbelief
It lights a path for me to journey on
And vents a brightness I can keep
That flair I need to live this song
Because the cause of lightness is heat

Verse 2:
I face the wrong and see the right
I see the path involves a fight
This world grips me in its claws
I know their phony rules and laws
I’ll break the bonds and I won’t retreat
Because the cause of lightness is heat

Chorus:
And the heat incinerates my wrongs
And the tarnish of my misbelief
It lights a path for me to journey on
And vents a brightness I can keep
That flair I need to live this song
Because the cause of lightness is heat

Verse 3:
And as this song becomes my call
I see the truth that trumps them all
And lifts me to sacred places
To where I won’t see their faces
I’ll bust this cage, become complete
Because the cause of lightness is heat

Chorus:
And the heat incinerates my wrongs
And the tarnish of my misbelief
It lights a path for me to travel on
And vents a brightness I can keep
That flair I need to live this song
Because the cause of lightness is heat

Coda:
The cause of lightness is heat
The cause of lightness is heat

Last edited on Wed Dec 4th, 2019 07:49 am by cmaja



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 Posted: Tue Dec 3rd, 2019 01:02 am
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Charles, this is a great rock song. Not sure what you had in mind but I'm hearing Procol Harum , Moody Blues or even post-Tommy Who...classic rock with orchestration... nice write... terrific continuity, return to the hook... i like it a lot.

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I wonder if you might switch to:
The cause of light is heat
Lightness to me means lack of weight and heat doesn't seem to fit there. Also it might sing more easily.

My other suggestion would be:
tarnishes > tarnish



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 Posted: Thu Dec 5th, 2019 05:40 pm
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Hey RD Man, lightness has a dual meaning, both light and reduction of weight due to heat —which is generated through movement. Thanks for the “tarnish.” suggestion. I changed it.

Charles



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 Posted: Thu Dec 5th, 2019 08:35 pm
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Hi Charles, You have some super great lines I love here.

"Though night draws me deep in dreams
Awake, asleep or in between"

"This world grips me in its claws
I know their phony rules and laws"

I also really like the chorus
Nice write.



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 Posted: Sat Dec 7th, 2019 05:29 am
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Thanks, Bunny and Andrea for your positive reviews. I did some backwards writing on this one —knowing where I wanted to end up and writing back to to the beginning. My dyslexic right brain works strangely.

Charles



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