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https://soundcloud.com/user-732643919/i-think-about-you-more-than-you-think-of-me

Tried something entirely different for sake of experimenting. Not entirely sure what this genre is called but it's something modern/electro/pop/dark. It's got some guitar in it too though, just heavily edited. It's strange, I have no idea what I'm doing with this style of music :p

Night, coloured cold
I want your heart-shaped stone
I know you don't want this
I know you don't

It's a different pace
Than all the other times
I've found a different face
I've found a different kind
The music that I make
Is always intertwined
With what I'm feeling lately
You're what I'm feeling lately

Is this a new beginning
A strange way of singing
A strange way to atone for how I've been sinning
With you in my mind
It's not like other times
I don't know how to fight
You; you're different kind

Night, coloured cold
I want your heart-shaped stone
I know you don't want this
I know you don't
Day turns old
I don't care what I'm told
I can't just let this go
I want you

Have you seen it yet?
It's been far too long
I've got my heart set
Far too many songs
You give me something new
I don't care if I'm wrong
All I want is you
All I want is you

Is this a new beginning
A strange way of singing
A strange way to atone for how I've been sinning
With you in my mind
It's not like other times
I don't know how to fight
You; you're different kind

Night, coloured cold
I want your heart-shaped stone
I know you don't want this
I know you don't
Day turns old
I don't care what I'm told
I can't just let this go
I want you

Last edited on Sun Dec 1st, 2019 11:30 am by Asith

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Very strange but cool. Never heard anything quite like it, and that's saying something.
Keep experimenting, and I'll be along for the ride.
Really digging your music. Followed you over at soundcloud.

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I like this a lot. It reminds me of Billie Eilish
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=DyDfgMOUjCI
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=HUHC9tYz8ik

The only suggestion would be to maybe add a musical hook/motif to add contrast.

Thanks for sharing.

James

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I like it. Very different, but engaging.

Only suggestion is to make it a bit less disconnected, try to slide from one part to another without the breaks. Make it feel like a single integrated song.

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This is cool, I like it! You need the make the vocals more clarion, the music is kinda drowning out the singing. Keep working on it.

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I find this quite scary! One of the strangest things I've heard in a long time. There's something quite compelling about it though. Not sure about the mix - it sounds very bass heavy to me but that maybe deliberate I guess. This is great cos it really is different.:)

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I like what you're doing with the voice with the auto harmonizer (?)
As a whole it seems to work in a strange kind of way. I agree that the breaks disjoint it and are distracting from the feel you seem to want it to have.
:)John B


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