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Cooler Than The Underside Of A Pillow
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 Posted: Tue Nov 19th, 2019 12:07 am
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bunnythesinger
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She's kinda like the Dos Equis guy... the most interesting woman in the world...lol

Been accumulating metaphors and similes that I thought were fun and interesting...kinda looks like I dumped a whole bucketful here.. Thinking medium fast country, Lots of lead and harmonica solos.

As always, I appreciate corrections, suggestions, and comments. Thanks for reading. Rock on to this one.

Bunny

Cooler Than The Underside Of A Pillow

Verse1
Oh my baby
Never says maybe
Sometimes yes
And sometimes no

Got her own money
Sweeter than honey
Makes me guess
But she always knows

Chorus1
She's more surprising than a Christmas morning stocking
She's cuter than a giggling newborn child
She's cooler than the underside of a pillow
Shes brighter than a brand new penny - every time she smiles

Whoaaaah Yeah!

Instrumental

Verse 2
Cmon baby
Your love saves me
Sometimes stop
And sometimes go

The way you do me
See right through me
Makes me drop
My guard down low

Chorus 2
She's got more moves than a Bobby Fisher chessboard
Her heart's as warm as onesie fleece pjs
She's as playful as washtub full of puppies
She makes me happy as a clam that I'm her's - every single day

Get it....

Instrumental

Bridge
Dont let me hear you say a thing about her that ain't nice
In a world that's often cold and grey she's an island paradise

Oh yeah...

Verse 3
When I'm not near you
I still hear you
Makes me laugh
Makes me cry

Things that I do
Just to show you
Youre my path
And this is why

Chorus3
You're as pretty as sunset on a snowy afternoon
You're more fun than a Slinky on the stairs
You're the greatest thing to ever happen in my life
And you're the one who makes me happy -that someone cares.

Instrumental

Post chorus
You're smoother than the satin trim on a new blanket
You're cuter than a giggling newborn child
You're cooler than the underside of a pillow
You're brighter than a brand new penny. - every time you smile

© Copyright 2019 John Parrish

Last edited on Tue Nov 19th, 2019 12:09 am by bunnythesinger



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 Posted: Tue Nov 19th, 2019 08:17 am
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This is cool, Bunny! Your verses could be choruses and visa versa but that’s okay since it really doesn’t matter. You vary from second to third person; maybe stick with one. Word repetition, metaphors and rhymes are fun. It’s sweet!

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 Posted: Tue Nov 19th, 2019 08:51 am
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Trying it in Second person. Actually posting in a reply rather than editing so I can see both. Bunny

Cooler Than The Underside Of A Pillow

Verse1
Oh my baby
Never says maybe
Sometimes yes
And sometimes no

Got your own money
Sweeter than honey
Makes me guess
But you always know

Chorus1
You're more surprising than a Christmas morning stocking
You're cuter than a giggling newborn child
You're cooler than the underside of a pillow
You're brighter than a brand new penny - every time you smile

Whoaaaah Yeah!

Instrumental

Verse 2
Cmon baby
Your love saves me
Sometimes stop
And sometimes go

The way you do me
See right through me
Makes me drop
My guard down low

Chorus 2
You've got more moves than a Bobby Fisher chessboard
Your heart's as warm as onesie fleece pjs
You're as playful as washtub full of puppies
You make me happy as a clam that I'm yours - every single day

Get it....

Instrumental

Bridge
Dont let me hear them say a thing about you that ain't nice
In a world that's often cold and grey you're my island paradise

Oh yeah...

Verse 3
When I'm not near you
I still hear you
Makes me laugh
Makes me cry

Things that I do
Just to show you
Youre my path
And this is why

Chorus3
You're as pretty as sunset on a snowy afternoon
You're more fun than a Slinky on the stairs
You're the greatest thing to ever happen in my life
And you're the one who makes me happy -that someone cares.

Post chorus
You're smoother than the satin trim on a new blanket
You're cuter than a giggling newborn child
You're cooler than the underside of a pillow
You're brighter than a brand new penny. - every time you smile

© Copyright 2019 John Parrish

Last edited on Tue Nov 19th, 2019 08:52 am by bunnythesinger



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 Posted: Tue Nov 19th, 2019 10:12 am
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And of course the third person version...


Cooler Than The Underside Of A Pillow

Verse1
Oh my baby
Never says maybe
Sometimes yes
And sometimes no

Got her own money
Sweeter than honey
Makes me guess
But she always knows

Chorus1
She's more surprising than a Christmas morning stocking
She's cuter than a giggling newborn child
She's cooler than the underside of a pillow
She's brighter than a brand new penny - every time she smiles

Whoaaaah Yeah!

Instrumental

Verse 2
Cmon baby
Her love saves me
Sometimes stop
And sometimes go

The way she do me
See right through me
Makes me drop
My guard down low

Chorus 2
She's got more moves than a Bobby Fisher chessboard
Her heart's as warm as onesie fleece pjs
She's as playful as washtub full of puppies
She makes me happy as a clam that I'm hers - every single day

Get it....

Instrumental

Bridge
Dont let me hear them say a thing about her that ain't nice
In a world that's often cold and grey she's my island paradise

Oh yeah...

Verse 3
When I'm not near her
I still hear her
Makes me laugh
Makes me cry

Things I told'er
Just to show her
She's my path
And this is why

Chorus3
She's as pretty as sunset on a snowy afternoon
She's more fun than a Slinky on the stairs
She's the greatest thing to ever happen in my life
And she's the one who makes me happy -that someone cares.

Post chorus
She's smoother than the satin trim on a new blanket
She's cuter than a giggling newborn child
She's cooler than the underside of a pillow
She's brighter than a brand new penny. - every time she smiles

© Copyright 2019 John Parrish



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