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 Posted: Sun Nov 10th, 2019 04:28 am
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I wrote this last year but the composer I sent it to is not used to composing blues type songs. CMA

If I Could Only
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A1:
If I could only work my way through
The tears that I bear from losing you
If I could only accept adieus
That tell my soul to leave you in lieu
If I could only gather the parts
And mend together this broken heart
A2:
If I could only understand why
My fears and despair are always nigh
If I could only accept goodbyes
That tell my heart to leave you and die
If I could only gather my thoughts
And then, however, connect-the-dots

Bridge:
Advice of friends, the texts I send, the flights I fend; if they would only
End endless nights, lose loveless plights, my life —it bites, leaving me lonely
A3:
If you would phone me, call in-the-blind
To answer my prayer, oh, nevermind
If I could only accept the signs
That tell my mind to leave love behind
If I could only somehow depart
And heal forever this broken heart

© 2018 Charles M Anderson

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 Posted: Sun Nov 10th, 2019 10:18 am
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Wow Charles. Floods of emotions evoked here. Really like the structure, and the rhyming is wonderful. The song has a nice patter to it, so important for a blues singer to be ablento put their signature phrasing to it. I hear Mel Torme in that bridge, man I miss his phrasings...love it when drummers sing...they punctuate lyrics like no others do.

Very nice write.👍

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 Posted: Tue Nov 12th, 2019 05:12 am
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Thanks Bunny. I tried to make it as bluesy as I could. Yea, I think Mel would love to sing it. I can almost hear him accenting the right words to bring out the sultriness of it.

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 Posted: Thu Nov 21st, 2019 03:45 am
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Very nice. There's only one word I would change, and that's the second "you". Because it's the second "you".

But, that's just me. Cool lyrics.

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 Posted: Thu Nov 21st, 2019 06:27 pm
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Snowman wrote:
Very nice. There's only one word I would change, and that's the second "you". Because it's the second "you".

But, that's just me. Cool lyrics.


Thanks Snowman. I think you’re right. I changed it.

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 Posted: Sat Nov 23rd, 2019 09:22 pm
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Nice. When I was writing the post, I was trying to think of a substitute word, and my mind went blank. Good job!

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 Posted: Sun Nov 24th, 2019 07:28 am
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Snowman wrote:
Nice. When I was writing the post, I was trying to think of a substitute word, and my mind went blank. Good job!

Hey Snowman. I thought I’d have to change the entire line but ‘in lieu’ fit in pretty easily. I didn’t want to change the second line neither. That would have been a pain. Thanks again.

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