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SongWriterJoe
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Title: (Show Me What's) Deep In Yo' Heart
Lyrics Copyright © Nov 8, 2019 Joe Givens

{Could Be R & B Or Pop Style - Lively Tempo}

{Instrumental Intro}

{V1}

We were made for each other
Baby ya kno-o-ow it
Come on let go yo' feelin's
Why don't ya show it?
Ya just gonna take it.. an'
Throw it a-a-a-all away?
Show me what's deep, deep in yo' heart!

Doncha leave me here hang-in'
If ya don't me-e-ean it
Come on tell me the truth now
Make me believe it
Can this ever real-ly be
just like they all say? 5

{To Chorus:}

{Instrumental Bridge}

{V2}

Ya just playin' me.. or
Is this for-e-e-ever?
Do ya feel the way I do?
Don't be so cle-ver.
Wanna believe ya, but I
I feel so afraid.
Show me what's deep, deep in yo' heart

Yeah, I wanna believe ya.
Feelin' so lo-o-onely
Please help me to understand..
I love ya only.
All I know is I'm so confused
Yeah I need to know..

{To Chorus:}

{Chorus - sung with deep feeling}

Show me what's deep in yo' heart!
What's deep in yo' heaaaaarrrrt..
Deep in yo' heart..
Yo' heart.. yeah, ba-by, ba-by..
Just show me what's deep in yo' heart!!

{Outro}

{END}

Last edited on Fri Nov 8th, 2019 04:58 pm by SongWriterJoe

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Last edited on Fri Nov 8th, 2019 04:55 pm by SongWriterJoe

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Joe, I really like what you got going on here. Great start. Nice repeat of the hook, and it works. Great job. Kinda depend on phrasing and stylings of the vocalists as to what it sounds like. Thats the beauty of R & B for me, that the music, a lot like jazz leaves so much of the interpretation of the piece to the artist and there is that spirit of improv within the performance. Nicely done

Just as an example the classic "Respect"...originally there was the Otis Redding version which was great, but very different than the Aretha Franklin version, which is so wonderful and unforgetable. Same song done in the same era , two different interpretations, Both great...

Bunny

Last edited on Fri Nov 8th, 2019 01:14 pm by bunnythesinger

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Thanks, bunny!

Last edited on Fri Nov 8th, 2019 05:00 pm by SongWriterJoe

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Great that you're thinking about how this is going to sound and be sung.
That comes through very clearly in how you're writing the lyric.

Some nice lines there like:
Come on tell me the truth now
Make me believe it


but overall it feels like the lyric is a vehicle for the singer to express themselves via the singing rather than the words themselves.
And there's nothing wrong in that! Feels like a good fit for an R&B song.

One to be heard rather than read I think.

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A guy asked me to write this for his young niece. Thought I'd give it a shot.


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