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 Posted: Fri Nov 1st, 2019 12:43 am
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Nzuri
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Song -Street lights / Slow / or R&B

Intro- Street lights , Street light

(Verse 1)

Its after Dark
I’m on my way
I’m doing 85
On the highway
I’m in the car
To see you
I got my lingerie
On too boo
No phone
No text
Baby ready to have sex
No one home
Just me and u
Let’s do it
all night boo


(Chorus 1)

1.Streets lights X2
2. Baby can I come when the streets lights on

(Verse 2)
I’ll keep it quiet all night
Even if I have to bite
Take it slow baby , don’t go in to deep
Don’t rush baby , take slow thrush in me
All night , all day
Until streets lights go away
Round 2 the next day
I’ll be back on the highway
Lights on baby
I hope everybody
Sleep

(Chorus 2)

1.Streets lights x2
2. Baby can I come when the streets lights on



By Songwriter ,Regina Phillips a.k.a Nxuri

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 Posted: Sat Nov 2nd, 2019 04:20 am
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Feels like it should work in that Slow/R&B style you mentioned.

The chorus feels a bit short, even with the first line repeated. You might repeat the whole thing again, potentially use a different second line as a variation.

Just for info, be aware that explicit lyrics may be edited or deleted here on TSF, as we aim to be child/family friendly. This one is fine, no problem, just making you aware that the policy exists as I know you've only just arrived.



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