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 Posted: Mon Oct 21st, 2019 04:24 am
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Wrote this in the ‘90s and, looking back at the original, I see I only added two lines to the bridge sometime this year. CMA

Wrote Another Song
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A1:
Wrote another song late last night
They come when I’m not feeling right
When I’m thinking of you
And all we’ve been through
I just can’t pretend
Love goes on without end
I pray I’ll see you once more
Not live this life though this pen

A2:
Wrote another song yesterday
It seems that they won’t go away
They keep calling for you
And leaving me blue
They don’t seem to end
If I’d only transcend
This halfway state I deplore
And live my life once again

Bridge:
How did I ever get stuck in this strange world of doubt
Placing my trust in lyric and rhyme
How long will love take its leave and leave me without
A path to revive our love so sublime

A3:
Wrote another song in my dreams
It seems my mind split at its seams
I can’t live without you
You know that it’s true
Since you’re my godsend
Could you just comprehend
I have to see you once more
And put this song to an end

(Instrumental bridge)

A3:
Wrote another song in my dreams
It seems my mind split at its seams
I can’t live without you
You know that it’s true
Since you’re my godsend
Could you just comprehend
I have to see you once more
And put this song to an end

© 1994 Charles M Anderson



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 Posted: Mon Aug 31st, 2020 10:23 pm
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Oldie. Some good lines but your later verse is much more fluid



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I like the "wrote another song" concept with the different time frames. Conveys the sense of being stuck, and also lends itself to lines like "Placing my trust in lyric and rhyme" (one of my fav lines here).

Not sure you need the repeat on A3. Probably one to decide on after it's set to music though. Just reading it, it feels pretty complete after the first one, and you have that line to end on: "And put this song to an end".



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MASempine wrote:
Oldie. Some good lines but your later verse is much more fluid

Thanks, MAS, for your review. It’s kinda old but still decent blues. Pleased you like it.

Charles



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 Posted: Tue Sep 1st, 2020 06:59 am
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RainyDayMan wrote:
I like the "wrote another song" concept with the different time frames. Conveys the sense of being stuck, and also lends itself to lines like "Placing my trust in lyric and rhyme" (one of my fav lines here).

Not sure you need the repeat on A3. Probably one to decide on after it's set to music though. Just reading it, it feels pretty complete after the first one, and you have that line to end on: "And put this song to an end".


Hey, RD Man... “Placing my trust...” was one of the two lines I added last year to a 25 year old lyric. If I remember correctly, I wrote one morning when the idea pop it my head as I was awakening.

A musical bridge followed by a repeat and build of one of the stanzas —usually the first or last— is typical of blues. The composer and singer can work it out.

Thanks for your review and comments.

Charles



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