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 Posted: Sat Oct 19th, 2019 10:29 pm
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#22 in the 30 in 30 challenge

I already have the music for this. My favorite jail/prison song is an old country song by Jimmie Skinner...called Doing My Time ...my favorite version is the Marty Stuart/Johnny Cash duet. Always made we want to write a jail song.

Enjoy.

As usual, corrections, suggestions, and comments are all welcome.

I Walk the Yard

Verse 1
Spend my days in the field of this hopeless prison farm
Pulling carrots and digging weeds out in the sun
Your precious letters say your lonely and you're glad I'm out of harm
And you're so grateful I'm no longer on the run

Verse 2
I wanted money for a diamond ring so you would be my bride
Said I'd drive the car to help their get away
While we didn't count on trouble, we found it waiting just outside
They got collared and you know I couldn't stay

Chorus
I walk the yard and think of you
And all the heartache, I put you through
My life of crime, has brought me shame
Whatever happens, I know I'm to blame

Verse 3
Though the prison doors shut quick for them, my partners never talked
My successful flee from justice let me be
But when freedom means you watch your back no matter where you walk
Behind the bars can actually make you free

Chorus
I walk the yard and think of you
And all the heartache, I put you through
My life of crime, has brought me shame
Whatever happens, I know I'm to blame

Verse 4
As I pace this cell and count the days till I get off this farm
Reflecting on my short lived life of crime
Longing for the day when I'm back in your loving arms
Having changed my wicked ways and done my time.

Chorus
I walk the yard and think of you
And all the heartache, I put you through
My life of crime, has brought me shame
Whatever happens, I know I'm to blame

© Copyright 2019 John Parrish

Last edited on Sun Oct 20th, 2019 02:09 am by bunnythesinger



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 Posted: Sun Oct 20th, 2019 12:50 am
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Chorus
I walk the yard an' think of you
An' all the heartache I put ya (you) through
My life of crime has brought me shame
Whatever happens, I know (that) I'm ta blame

A little hint, if you want to write Country lyrics people relate to:

Instead if ending a word in "ing", use " in' " instead, likewise "and" becomes " an' ". Simarly, 'going to' = (gonna) Have to or 'got to' = (gotta)

Whenever you can, delete 'that', as the word is usually dead weight - a few exceptions; use your gut feeling. Remember, especially when framing this kind of character, (pun INTENDED!), he generally won't speak the 'queen's english', nor will bar brawlers or cowboys.

SWJ

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 Posted: Sun Oct 20th, 2019 01:14 am
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Thanks Joe. Noted for sure.... i actually have a song called Arduous Ambiguity which uses the word that for nearly everything....I wrote it just to remind myself about the "thats" ...lol. Sometimes I include them for counts when I am doing a test sing. I usually pull them out.

Thanks for the read.

Bunny



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 Posted: Sun Oct 20th, 2019 02:22 am
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Yea Bunny, punishment is a kindness and this shows that. Verse 4, Lin’s 1-3 are a bit shorter than the other three. I don’t know how this difference turns out musically. I guess you got that worked out.

‘Behind the bars can actually make you free’ is my favorite line. Good job!

Charles



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 Posted: Sun Oct 20th, 2019 04:18 am
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Yeah, musically they work. Music to this one is very bluegrassy which is obviously the verse chorus structure. .. performed it may actually repeat a chorus after an instrumental breakdown in the middle and possibly at the end. The chorus was written for short tight bluegrass harmonies...although as of now ive done it as straight country and it sings well that way too.Love a song that can do double duty.

Bunny



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