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 Posted: Sat Oct 5th, 2019 04:31 pm
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http://www.howmarwriters.com/HMSongs/Lakota/Song23.mp3

Honky Tonk Trail of Tears

The story of my years has been a honky tonk trail of tears
Pages filled with nameless faces and demons I have feared
Knowing looks from willing ladies all seemed to go with the flow
But if truth be known goodby is as easy as hello

Love and bedrooms get confused in the world of fantasy
A warm willing woman was always there to tend to my needs
Tomorrow never seemed to fill the memories I left behind
Yesterday soon was lost in the echoes in my mind

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Days gone by can't be relived no matter how I try
The book of life has passed me by like clouds in the sky
But now that it's said and done and I contemplate the years
The sad fact is my story's been a honky tonk trail of tears

Last edited on Sat Oct 5th, 2019 04:31 pm by hdolan

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 Posted: Mon Oct 7th, 2019 12:51 pm
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Sounding good. There's a lot I like about the lines and prosody with the music.

I wonder if you had a bridge that clarified a bit.....maybe it would be a twist, or maybe clarifying what you intend....on first thought it sounds like the singer is crying the trail of tears, but really the trail of tears is made by the women he leaves behind, not his own tears. I think getting that in there would add a layer of depth to the song.

Thanks for sharing.

James



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 Posted: Sat Oct 12th, 2019 02:06 am
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Wow. Fantastic. Great lyrics. That type of hook line only comes around once or twice in a life time and you manged to nab it. Way to go! I like it!



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 Posted: Wed Nov 6th, 2019 01:21 am
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This has great lyrics and a fantastic old time country feel to it which is perfect. I love the guitar work on this and the vocals are very good!
Well done!
Thanks for sharing.



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 Posted: Mon Nov 11th, 2019 06:06 pm
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I like this a lot! Your voice is great, I love the background singer in the chorus, sweet guitar. Excellent! One small suggestion: I think if you dropped the second ‘and’ from line 3 of the chorus, it’d come out smoother.

Charles

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 Posted: Fri Jan 3rd, 2020 04:42 am
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i,m a sucker for traditional country
maybe tomorrow never seems to fade the memories i left behind,
and maybe love and lust can get confused,,,,just a couple of thoughts,,



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