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# 7 of my 30 in 30

I have had an obsession with Whiter Shade of Pale since I was in High School and it has frequently been the stuck song in my head. I'm sure that the meter hurdles are pretty high on this one and I know it needs lots of touch ups. Just liked the idea of people dancing in an unusual place and then going back to their regular lives afterward. Thanks for reading and as always, suggestions, corrections, ideas are always appreciated.

Bunny

The Aisles of Manny's


Verse 1
I was sitting in the last booth of the first row
Of Manny's All Night Truck Stop : Drinks and Eats
Got out a fiver for the jukebox at the end of the booth
Thought I'd eat my steak and listen to some beats

Verse 2
My waitress brought my food and sat down with me
Asking "Sweetie, whacha list'ning to today?"
Fed the Rock-ola with the bill I gave her,
Pressed the buttons and the songs began to play.

Chorus 1
She slid out the booth and grabbed my hand
And as the opening organ strains began to wail
Slowly pulling me down the aisles of Manny's
To A Whiter... Shade of Pale

Instrumental

Verse 3
She whispered Hon, let's get this diner dancing
Then she grabbed a sleepy trucker by the hand
I tapped a lady of the evening on her shoulder
And we waltzed our way through trucker wonderland

Verse 4
We danced with everybody in that truckstop
The salesman, with a briefcase, from Pierre
The mom, with kids, who came in from the bus stop
She was Ginger Rodgers to my Fred Astaire

Chorus 2
We danced until that Rock-ola stopped playing
Then like clockwork everyone took back their seats
And everything once more returned to normal
At Mannys All Night Truck Stop : Drinks and Eats

Coda:
The neon sign's forever flashing Welcome
Like a drummer pounding out the beats
And a Whiter Shade of Pale's still on the jukebox
At Manny's All Night Truck Stop : Drinks and Eats......


© Copyright 2019 John Parrish

Last edited on Sat Oct 5th, 2019 05:11 am by bunnythesinger

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I wish this were true Bunny! Love the idea of everyone connecting through dance and sharing something extraordinary for just a little while.

Good song - hooked me in!

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It’s a musical, Bunny! Oh, how easy would it be to make a video for this one. You painted a lovely picture here right out of 1960s Hollywood. This is great! It’d even work for Dancing With The Stars.

Charles

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Charles, funny you say that...was kind of thinking through an old memory of doing West Side Story in hign school, and we would practice some of the musical numbers in the hall after hours using lockers opening and closing for percussion, and the acoustics...man, almost as good as the bathroom. A girl I was set to dance with, and me went to Arthur Murray to get some dance chops for the show and after learning a few ballroom steps we would dance in the grocery store to elevator music and try to get other customers to dance with us... it rarely worked but that was the dream. Thats the story behind the song... Glad you liked it. Thanks.

Bunny

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Thanks RDM...make sure you read my response to Charles as well...explains things a little more..when I write i generally have a phantom or generic melody that I use to help me try...i use that loosely..it is not my forte...to get the rhythm and meter correct. Most often my final versions sound nothing like what I had in my head when I wrote it unless on the rare occasions that i use a melody i had from a previous attempt left over and i decide to try and write to it. Thats a long way of getting to the point here, that the only phantom tune i could pattern this song with was whiter shade of pale...lol very loosely based and takes a vocal olympic athlete to fit some of the lines...I have not written the melody for tjis one yet...Im still trying to get WSOP out of my brain.

Glad you liked the concept.

Bunny


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