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 Posted: Thu Oct 3rd, 2019 02:15 am
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Have had the concept for this one in my notebook for awhile. Decided that it was time to finish it. As always, suggestions and course corrections are appreciated. Thanks for reading.

Bunny

The Nail

Verse 1
We were seven when we made that old fort
On the spot where our backyard met the woods
Out of wooden scraps and old recycled junk
That we picked up all around our neighborhood
We nailed up all the pieces that we brought there
Proudly through the streets in our red wagons
Over time we built the walls that kept us safe
From hooligans and pirate ships and dragons

Chorus 1
On a post we nailed a bucket for our treasures
Comic books and ships with plastic sails
Everything we ever thought was precious
Was carefully protected by a nail

Verse 2
We tied the knot the week we finished high school
In that little house we made a home so sweet
Working hard to always keep things going
In a year a little girl made us complete
As life got complicated we still struggled
And though our problems always seemed to multiply
Somehow never more than we could handle
In our hearts we knew we only had to try

Chorus 2
At my workbench I hung the pictures of my family
Each time I looked they were there without fail
And everything I ever thought was precious
Hung beautifully before me on a nail

Verse 3
We watched our brown hair grey with age together
Still certain of the love we've shared so long
The wisdom that a family is forever
Is every proof that love is never wrong
As the the story of our life looms near its ending
We came to understand what God's love for us entails
His willingness to save us by giving up his Son
And protecting us forever with a nail.

Instrumental chorus

Coda:
Everything we ever knew was precious
Has always been protected by a nail.

© Copyright 2019 John Parrish



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 Posted: Thu Oct 3rd, 2019 03:30 am
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Boy, you nailed this one, Bunny! The time and maturation vignettes run nicely from verse to verse. The instrumental chorus and coda polish it up perfectly. Superb visuals, great lyric!

Charles

Last edited on Thu Oct 3rd, 2019 08:03 am by cmaja



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 Posted: Thu Oct 3rd, 2019 03:58 am
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Thanks Charles. I have gone all over the place with this one... had verse one for awhile...and knew where i wanted to go, but struggled to get there...was worried that i wouldnt.

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 Posted: Wed Dec 18th, 2019 07:31 pm
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I never knew where the tale was going until it got to verse 3, line 6.
You nailed it well.Love it. Good job!

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 Posted: Wed Dec 18th, 2019 09:14 pm
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Thank you Jo Ash. It was a song I felt like I was called to write. Years ago during a crisis point in my life I reached out to one of my favorite songwriters, who is well known in Nashville for his bucking the system and doing his own thing when Nashville did not want to record his mostly Christian message and started his own label. Always inspirational to me. I had the tidbits that became this one back them... sometimes fruit takes a long time to ripen.

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Did the couple get saved when they were old? Also, it can be difficult for an audience to follow when a chorus changes to completely different lyrics. Is there a way to make both chorus the same? I like the story.

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Hi Bunny, You are one of the best story tellers in lyrics. I was feeling it all until V3. I want to love the tie in to Jesus, but it is maybe a verse away. The nail is perfect, but it need something more to bring from these people and Jesus. Just my opinion, but I hope to see more. Enjoy



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Hey Bunny, good job. I like the story.

Unfortunately there is a key thematic element that is not working for me. In the line...
"Was carefully protected by a nail" --- The word "protected" doesn't seem to fit.
Perhaps "secured" is a better word? As in, Was carefully secured by a nail.

- Sketch

PS -- I am back in the studio working on the dozen songs I wrote lyrics for last Summer.
I thought of you yesterday when I was working on a song that you had responded well to.
Should be posting the demo in a few weeks. These things take time, as you know.



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