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 Posted: Sat Sep 28th, 2019 08:53 pm
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Love Gone Blue
_________________AABA
A1:
I know it’s been awhile
Although it’s not my style
To say my heart been wronged
You say we’ve both outgrew
This love where we belonged
Since then our love’s gone blue

A2:
Each day is like a year
The day you left me here
Alone without a trace
I pray love will renewed
So I can see your face
And mend our love gone blue

Bridge:
I scold myself saying I mustn’t cling
To this love despite the heartaches it brings
So I force myself to remove this ring

A3:
I guess I can’t amend
This love that will suspend
I know you like things free
Someday I may pull through
To please you I’ll agree
To end our love gone blue

(Instrumental bridge)

A3: (repeat, build)
I guess I can’t amend
This love that will suspend
I know you like things free
Someday I may pull through
To please you I’ll agree
To end our love gone blue

Coda:
To end our love gone... blue...

© 2019 Charles M Anderson



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 Posted: Sat Sep 28th, 2019 10:04 pm
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I like the "love gone blue" hook.
Blue as in lacking oxygen, also as in sad, and as in the blues style.

There's a formality to the lyric that seems just a tad out for the blues format. The English just seems too proper in:
I scold myself saying I mustn’t cling and similar phrases.
I feel like Blues should be a bit grittier.

But the fatalism that the love is ending, and that at some future point he will have to let go, seems a good fit.



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 Posted: Thu Oct 3rd, 2019 05:02 pm
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It’s proper blues, RD Man, from across the pond. Thanks for the good review.

Charles



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 Posted: Sun Oct 6th, 2019 03:45 am
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Charles, I really like this. Lyrics work..works as blues tune for me. One thing Inreally appreciate are the writer's notes. It really helps me get a better feeling for what you as a writer have in mind for the song.

Nice job.

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 Posted: Sun Oct 6th, 2019 04:31 am
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Hey Bunny, I wrote this originally back in the 90s, but changed it some. The bridge is completely different, a few words changed in the verses —A stanzas, and a title change. I have a tendency to use the AABA format when writers blues lyrics as it was used extensively in the early to mid 1900s. It’s perfect for blues music and my blues composer, who I haven’t heard from in awhile, loves that format. Repeating the bridge instrumentally followed by one of the A stanzas use a lot in blues. The A stanzas are a verse with a refrain or a chorus that changes. Glad you like it.

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