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I had tabled the first part of this lyric for a few weeks not knowing how to complete it. Fortunately Bunny came through and finished it in a snap.

She Wears Her Heart On Deceive
______________________Verse/Chorus
Verse 1:
Auburn hair, a smile to light my heart
Shows unconcern but has her wits
She comes to me with her lips so red, her eyes so dark
Smiles and says, “I don’t ever do this.
Could you be someone I know;
Is there somewhere we could go?”

Verse 2:
She has flare and spends it everywhere
With love to burn, she’s well equipped
She comforts me with kisses and hints she’ll always care
“I’ll never leave you.” Sighs from her lips
But her words aren’t what they seem
Is she throwing me a scheme

Chorus:
Now I can barely conceive
Something hidden in her soul
And I’m starting to believe
She’s tryna take control
Seems she wears her heart on deceive

Verse 3:
Always an actress, she watches cues
Still she’s refining, rehearsing
Well practiced lines, lies to keep her puppets in a ruse
But it’s only mirrors and smokescreens
And the script is still the same
Has she told me her real name

Chorus:
Now I can barely conceive
Something hidden in her soul
And I’m starting to believe
She’s tryna take control
Seems she wears her heart on deceive

Coda:
Her auburn hair, dark eyes, her red lips
Have kept me at her fingertips
But her promised love’s only make believe
Seems she wears her heart on deceive

© 2019 Charles M Anderson & John Parrish

Last edited on Sat Sep 21st, 2019 04:30 pm by cmaja

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The concept is cool, instead of sleeve, but for me it doesn’t work. Her heart’s set on deceit, or to deceive? I just have a hard time making the transition sound smooth. I think you have a good start but for me the word play doesn’t work. I could be wrong. See what the others have to say. How about- most women are prim and proper, but this one I believe, is out to rip a heart out, her hearts set on deceive?

Last edited on Fri Sep 20th, 2019 08:46 pm by M.P. Dudash

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Well I'm fine with "heart on deceive", but I get stuck on "tryna taking control". Shouldn't that be "tryna take control"?

But I like the overall narrative and the play on words.

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Thanks, RD Man, for noticing the typo. Corrected.

Charles

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It's funny how when you are reading through alyric so many times, you read it correctly, even if theres a typo. I missed it too. Crazy

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I like the play on words, clever

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I kind of like the title. It was intriguing - a nice play on the original saying.
A fun story, with a little suspense to boot. I like the chorus, and the coda is great.

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Hi Andrea,
I started with the chorus, got stuck at verse 3, so Bunny finished it including the coda. Yea, I love the coda too.

Charles

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Charles had great bones for this song and honestly, the last verse and coda came to me pretty much on the read through. That only happens when you got great stuff to start with, especially that chorus.

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bunnythesinger wrote:
Charles had great bones for this song and honestly, the last verse and coda came to me pretty much on the read through. That only happens when you got great stuff to start with, especially that chorus.

Bunny


That’s exactly what I think when I’m collaborating with a lyric originated by you, Bunny. Thanks for the compliment.

Charles


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