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 Posted: Fri Sep 13th, 2019 02:19 pm
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Yellowstone


Verse1
Got a rental car in Santa Fe
Drove to Denver through the desert
To a roadside motel five miles out of town.
Spent the next three days in underwear
Dancing on the bed to Elvis songs
Telling dirty jokes until the sun went down.

Verse 2
Two hours north of Cheyenne,
On a checkered blanket in the sand
Shared a picnic on a cold Wyoming day
By the time that we made Cody
Everything about you changed
As the sun went down you looked at me to say

Chorus
Im never going back to Yellowstone,
Being here with you just breaks my heart in two
We fell in love in Yellowstone
By a mountain stream beneath a sky of blue
And everywhere I look in Yellowstone
Are reminders of the love that we once knew
But to leave you here in Yellowstone
Is the hardest thing I'll ever have to do.

Verse3
Took the trail across the vista
As the sun met the horizon
To the rustic cabin where we often came
Gazing at the shooting stars
From the darkness of the porch
You found the railing where I'd carved your name.

Chorus

Verse 4
Our last night we shared a pillow
You were singing in the dark
Sunrise found you sitting streamside by a tree
You opened up a mason jar
On the spot where we first met
Overturned the jar, and set my ashes free.

Chorus

But to leave you here in Yellowstone
Is the hardest thing I'll ever have to do.



©Copyright 2019 John Parrish

Last edited on Sun Sep 15th, 2019 01:15 pm by bunnythesinger



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 Posted: Fri Sep 13th, 2019 09:28 pm
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Hi Bunny,
This is haunting and beautiful. I couldn’t quite make sense of it, as I was reading it, until I got to verse 4. Verses need meter and line length work to make it more singable. But it’s another superb lyric by a prolific songwriter.

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 Posted: Fri Sep 13th, 2019 09:49 pm
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Thanks Charles. Been working on the music to this one all morning...and interestingly, it sings better than it reads, probably because it's sometimes easier to phrase a lyric with strategic pauses and fill with music.
Lyrically, I wrote the first line of the chorus and it haunted me for a few days to the point that i had to write in order to figure out why she never wants to go back. The story developed itself at that point. Glad you liked it... Im finding a few places to tighten up things. Watch for the edits.

Thanks,

Bunny



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 Posted: Sun Sep 15th, 2019 08:21 pm
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Interesting point of view. It took me a couple tries to make it work, but I got it. I like the story, but worry it might be confusing. Since the singing is going well, I will hope it is turning out nicely.



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I like the story, I to was confused until I got to the end. I feel like that first made it all come together. Nice right overall I enjoyed it.



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 Posted: Sun Sep 15th, 2019 11:49 pm
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Thanks, Im glad you all are enjoying this one. Really, Its just a a road trip / breakup song with a twist at the end. I wanted the reader/listener to feel the contradictions of her wanting one last fling with her lover and the reality setting in of having to let him go...and her having the same conflicts about the place they met and fell in love and the place she let him go. Its a pretty piece in G with just 4 simple chords finger picked mostly on a classical guitar...trying to get a recording of it im not embarrassed of to post. Thanks for all the feedback... have employed a lot of the changes suggested and appreciate them all.

Bunny

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Yep, this is one that all comes together late in the song.
It starts out almost playfully, then the chorus is an abrupt change of mood without real explanation, then at verse 4 it all makes sense.

Glad to hear you say you are working on the music. Look forward to hearing it.



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Thanks RDM...I hate to say that I had fun with it...considering I knew the outcome..but I really did, the hard part was keeping the secret till the end. I almost turned the twist in the first three lines of V4 and did a lament of some sort in the last 3 but I liked the last two lines of the chorus so much i felt like it was going to be enough to reinforce the "reveal".

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