| Welcome to The Songwriters' Forum - by Songwriters, for Songwriters! Please log on to view our discussion forum in its entirety. |
| Moderated by: Troy33, RainyDayMan, HankTheTank | ||
| Author | Post | |||||||||||||
|---|---|---|---|---|---|---|---|---|---|---|---|---|---|---|
|
Motorist Sketchbook Member 
|
If we had a Hip Hop or Rap section, I might put this there. It seems Gospel is the closest match. Mostly due to the spiritual content. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Title: Devil Talkin' Track Time: 00:00 / BPM: 00 VS 1 "Ain't nobody watching" Dat's dat devil dare talkin' "Only the good die young." Dat's dat devil dare talkin' "You only go around once." Dat's dat devil dare talkin' "Better grab all the gusto." Dat's dat devil dare talkin' CHORUS 1 (spoken like Rap/Hip-hop) There's an unanswered question - in Genesis three I'll have to say - it's always intrigued me. Adam said he hid - 'cause he was naked God asked - "Who told you that you were naked?" - Who indeed? VS 2 "Go on, you deserve it." Dat's dat devil dare talkin' "I'll try anything once." Dat's dat devil dare talkin' "It's just experimenting." Dat's dat devil dare talkin' "Whatever gets you through the night." Dat's dat devil dare talkin' CHORUS 2 (spoken like Rap/Hip-hop) That voice in your head - is messin' with you If you listen to it - you'll be a fool Learn to discern - right from wrong You have to resist - if you want to be strong - Heed the word! MOSTLY INSTRUMENTAL ENDING Dat's dat devil dare talkin' (repeat) Who indeed? (repeat) Heed the word! (repeat) © Steve Lundgren 2019 ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ |
|||||||||||||
|
bunnythesinger Member 
|
Sketch, this really intrigues me. I taught in a 99% African American population high school years ago which had a Gospel Choir vs a tradional glee club/ chorus. This was just at the advent of the rap/hiphop (late 70s) breakthrough and they did a lot of call and response sometimes hip/hoppy gospel usually featuring a soloist/choir responding. What I wouldnt give to hear them perform this. Man that choir gave me goosebumps when rhey sang ...it was thrilling to listen to them. Two thumbs up. And thanks for a trip back in time. Bunny |
|||||||||||||
|
bunnythesinger Member
|
This accidentally reposted ...oops...stuttering fingers Last edited on Tue Sep 3rd, 2019 09:48 am by bunnythesinger |
|||||||||||||
|
Motorist Sketchbook Member
|
bunnythesinger wrote: Sketch, this really intrigues me. I taught in a 99% African American population high school years ago which had a Gospel Choir vs a tradional glee club/ chorus. This was just at the advent of the rap/hiphop (late 70s) breakthrough and they did a lot of call and response sometimes hip/hoppy gospel usually featuring a soloist/choir responding. What I wouldnt give to hear them perform this. Man that choir gave me goosebumps when rhey sang ...it was thrilling to listen to them. Two thumbs up. And thanks for a trip back in time. Thanks, Bunny. Those are some great comments. I didn't even realize that I had built the call/answer aspect into this. But there it is. I was planning to handle it that way in the demo recording. The verse lyrics were sitting in my music notebook from a year ago. I wrote the choruses yesterday. It came together nicely. I have another Hip-Hop style song to release later today. But I'll probably put that under Pop. - Sketch PS --- I did something similar last year. But I think this new one will be more pared-down. Here's the link in case you haven't heard it. Title: Who Ya Gonna Call, Big Daddy? https://soundcloud.com/user-426611522/who-ya-gonna-call-big-daddy-recall The song title came from something said to me by an African American. The hilarious conclusion to a tense situation, in which I had my flip phone open ready to call the police, due to a quickly developing conflict that was likely to end in a fist fight. When it broke off, that was the parting comment to me. Which stuck with me. I wrote it down in my music notebook. Previous forum topics. Lyrics/demo/remix http://www.thesongwritersforum.com/forum/view_topic.php?id=14585&forum_id=7&jump_to=117435#p117435 http://www.thesongwritersforum.com/forum/view_topic.php?id=14380&forum_id=7&jump_to=116365#p116365 Last edited on Tue Sep 3rd, 2019 10:41 am by Motorist Sketchbook |
|||||||||||||
|
MASempine Member 
|
Seems pretty good to me |
|||||||||||||
|
Motorist Sketchbook Member
|
MASempine wrote: Seems pretty good to me Thanks for the read and comment. Here's the topic with the demo recording. http://www.thesongwritersforum.com/forum/view_topic.php?id=15984&forum_id=8 Let me know what you think. Thanks. - Sketch |
|||||||||||||
|
MASempine Member
|
I ordinarily don't like rap but the recording "blows me away". Part of that is knowing that a guy on this forum made it happen, but I enjoyed it. Had to turn the volume down for my 96 year old mother in law, but she seemed to like it to. Good work. Better than the average bear as Yogi would have said. A lot better. Professional and engaging. |
|||||||||||||
|
Motorist Sketchbook Member
|
MASempine wrote: I ordinarily don't like rap but the recording "blows me away". Part of that is knowing that a guy on this forum made it happen, but I enjoyed it. Thanks for the listen and encouraging comments. I really had fun with this one. - Sketch |
|||||||||||||