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 Posted: Mon Sep 2nd, 2019 11:42 pm
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If we had a Hip Hop or Rap section, I might put this there.
It seems Gospel is the closest match. Mostly due to the spiritual content.

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Title: Devil Talkin'     Track Time: 00:00 / BPM: 00

VS 1
"Ain't nobody watching"
Dat's dat devil dare talkin'

"Only the good die young."
Dat's dat devil dare talkin'

"You only go around once."
Dat's dat devil dare talkin'

"Better grab all the gusto."
Dat's dat devil dare talkin'

CHORUS 1 (spoken like Rap/Hip-hop)
There's an unanswered question - in Genesis three
I'll have to say - it's always intrigued me.
Adam said he hid - 'cause he was naked
God asked - "Who told you that you were naked?"
- Who indeed?

VS 2
"Go on, you deserve it."
Dat's dat devil dare talkin'

"I'll try anything once."
Dat's dat devil dare talkin'

"It's just experimenting."
Dat's dat devil dare talkin'

"Whatever gets you through the night."
Dat's dat devil dare talkin'

CHORUS 2 (spoken like Rap/Hip-hop)  
That voice in your head - is messin' with you  
If you listen to it - you'll be a fool
Learn to discern - right from wrong
You have to resist - if you want to be strong
- Heed the word!

MOSTLY INSTRUMENTAL ENDING
Dat's dat devil dare talkin' (repeat)
Who indeed? (repeat)
Heed the word! (repeat)


© Steve Lundgren 2019
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Sketch, this really intrigues me. I taught in a 99% African American population high school years ago which had a Gospel Choir vs a tradional glee club/ chorus. This was just at the advent of the rap/hiphop (late 70s) breakthrough and they did a lot of call and response sometimes hip/hoppy gospel usually featuring a soloist/choir responding. What I wouldnt give to hear them perform this. Man that choir gave me goosebumps when rhey sang ...it was thrilling to listen to them. Two thumbs up. And thanks for a trip back in time.

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This accidentally reposted ...oops...stuttering fingers

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bunnythesinger wrote: Sketch, this really intrigues me. I taught in a 99% African American population high school years ago which had a Gospel Choir vs a tradional glee club/ chorus. This was just at the advent of the rap/hiphop (late 70s) breakthrough and they did a lot of call and response sometimes hip/hoppy gospel usually featuring a soloist/choir responding. What I wouldnt give to hear them perform this. Man that choir gave me goosebumps when rhey sang ...it was thrilling to listen to them. Two thumbs up. And thanks for a trip back in time.

Bunny

Thanks, Bunny. Those are some great comments.
I didn't even realize that I had built the call/answer aspect into this.
But there it is. I was planning to handle it that way in the demo recording.

The verse lyrics were sitting in my music notebook from a year ago.
I wrote the choruses yesterday. It came together nicely. 

I have another Hip-Hop style song to release later today.
But I'll probably put that under Pop.

- Sketch

PS --- I did something similar last year. But I think this new one will be more pared-down.
Here's the link in case you haven't heard it. Title: Who Ya Gonna Call, Big Daddy?
https://soundcloud.com/user-426611522/who-ya-gonna-call-big-daddy-recall

The song title came from something said to me by an African American.
The hilarious conclusion to a tense situation, in which I had my flip phone open
ready to call the police, due to a quickly developing conflict that was
likely to end in a fist fight. When it broke off, that was the parting comment to me.
Which stuck with me. I wrote it down in my music notebook.

Previous forum topics. Lyrics/demo/remix

http://www.thesongwritersforum.com/forum/view_topic.php?id=14585&forum_id=7&jump_to=117435#p117435


http://www.thesongwritersforum.com/forum/view_topic.php?id=14380&forum_id=7&jump_to=116365#p116365


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Seems pretty good to me



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MASempine wrote: Seems pretty good to me
Thanks for the read and comment.

Here's the topic with the demo recording.
http://www.thesongwritersforum.com/forum/view_topic.php?id=15984&forum_id=8

Let me know what you think. Thanks.

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I ordinarily don't like rap but the recording "blows me away". Part of that is knowing that a guy on this forum made it happen, but I enjoyed it.

Had to turn the volume down for my 96 year old mother in law, but she seemed to like it to. Good work. Better than the average bear as Yogi would have said. A lot better.

Professional and engaging.



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MASempine wrote: I ordinarily don't like rap but the recording "blows me away". Part of that is knowing that a guy on this forum made it happen, but I enjoyed it.

Had to turn the volume down for my 96 year old mother in law, but she seemed to like it to. Good work. Better than the average bear as Yogi would have said. A lot better.

Professional and engaging.

Thanks for the listen and encouraging comments. I really had fun with this one.

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