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cmaja
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Workin’ For The Man
Verse/Chorus
Chorus:
Workin’ for the man
Yes, I’m workin’ for the man
I do the best I can
When I’m workin’ for the man
It doesn’t matter how I try
I can never satisfy
So I better cash in all my chips
Before I get the can
 
Verse 1:
Everyday I do his chores, workin’ for the man
Every time I turn my head, he changes the game plan
I gotta lose this job and end financial pain
Before I waste my life away and end up more insane
 
Chorus: (as above)
Workin’ for the man
Yes, I’m workin’ for the man
I do the best I can
When I’m workin’ for the man
It doesn’t matter how I try
I can never satisfy
So I better cash in all my chips
Before I get the can
 
Verse 2:
Every way I do my tasks, workin’ for the man
Every time I need more dough, he simply kicks the can
I gotta get a life and tell him where to go
Before I burn my final bridge with nothing left to show
 
Chorus: (as above)
Workin’ for the man
Yes, I’m workin’ for the man
I do the best I can
When I’m workin’ for the man
It doesn’t matter how I try
I can never satisfy
So I better cash in all my chips
Before I get the can
 
Verse 3:
Every day I try to stop workin’ for the man, but
Everywhere I seek a job there’s someone with a scam
I gotta find a way to ditch this senseless scene
Before he hires someone new and leaves me with no green
 
Chorus: (as above)
Workin’ for the man
Yes, I’m workin’ for the man
I do the best I can
When I’m workin’ for the man
It doesn’t matter how I try
I can never satisfy
So I better cash in all my chips
Before I get the can

Coda:
District boss came looking ‘round
Wasn’t pleased with what’s goin’ down
Told my boss to get lost
And made me the new boss

© 1998 Charles M Anderson

Last edited on Sat Aug 10th, 2019 05:07 am by cmaja

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This one id really like to hear. I love it. Im thinking Asleep at the Wheel and Texas Swing. Thats what I love about good lyrics...5 different readers can have 5 different ideas and they all be great. Two thumbs up👍👍

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I love it. Reads like a Merle Haggard tune. If I may make a suggestion to take it or leave it...

Verse 1 and 2 are very similar (I really like verse 2- clever stuff in there).

Verse 1 and 2 read like he's stuck in a rut. In verse 3 he comes to a conclusion that he really needs to find a way out a way.

I would maybe consider getting rid of verse 1 or 2, it natually progresses to verse 3 which I like. So that would make verse 3 the new verse 2, and then add a new verse 3 which would show a resolve to leave before he gets the can in the first two lines, but then show bring it back to earth like it's impossible in lines 3 and 4.

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Thanks guys,
It’s a fun time working for terrible bosses. Had a bunch of them through the years. But if I didn’t get push around by those toads, I would have come up with this lyric. I remember one boss who said, “You think you can be a better boss than me.” I said, “Yes.” Fortunately I didn’t work directly for him.

Hey BRD,
Thanks for the suggestion about the verses. I’ll look into it. But I think the best approach is to add a coda to show his escape.

Charles


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