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 Posted: Sun Jul 28th, 2019 09:17 pm
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Jo ash
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Title: No One Like You

Verse 1

I can search this whole world
All rooms in heaven too
There’ll be no one young or old
That will be just like You:
You are God Almighty
That rules with humility

Chorus:

There is no one like You
There is no one like You
There is no one like You
The lamb who sits on heaven’s throne
The lamb who sits on heaven’s throne

Verse 2

When down and all alone
When friends have deserted me so
You remain the only one
When troubles won’t let go
You get me out of the pit
Stand me back on my feet

Verse 3

You began the beginning
Made all things from the dark
Gave life to all that’s living
Made man head of the park
No one was at the start
You alone, the first and last

Copyright © 2019 Jo Ash

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 Posted: Mon Jul 29th, 2019 07:43 am
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Very nice! Feels powerful, but personal too.

For your chorus, you could re-arrange along the lines of:
There is no one like You
There is no one like You
The lamb who sits on heaven’s throne
There is no one like You

but I don't know whether you already have music in mind and whether that would fit or not.



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 Posted: Mon Jul 29th, 2019 12:27 pm
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RainyDayMan,
thanks for your comment. I really appreciate it.
Your suggestion for the chorus is well taken also. I have been uncomfortable with having the first line of the chorus come three times. I've been contemplating making it two before now. Now I know I should.
I have a melody already and its still good with your suggestion. Thanks :thumbsup:thumbsup:Thumbs

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 Posted: Mon Jul 29th, 2019 11:59 pm
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I hope we get to hear that melody at some point :)



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 Posted: Tue Jul 30th, 2019 12:25 am
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I'm not a songwriter or a singer just a lyricist.
So I pray to get a collabo here to give life to these verses and chorus.
When that happens you will hear it.:)

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 Posted: Thu Oct 3rd, 2019 04:02 am
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Very nicely written Jo. I agree with RDM, It sounds very personal.

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 Posted: Mon Oct 7th, 2019 02:32 pm
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Bunny, thanks. Yeah, it's personal, and it can be personalized by the listener. That's how I intended it to be.

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This is very strong and to the point. Good job! You may want to repeat the chorus after verse 2 and/or 3.

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