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 Posted: Tue Jul 9th, 2019 04:45 pm
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cmaja
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My If-Only’s
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If only I had seen the love in you
If only I had known you were true
My life would’ve made more sense
And would require no defense
But all my if-only’s
Have just left me lonely

If only I had not been so resigned
If only I’d done what’s in my mind
My life wouldn’t gone amiss
And could have been full of bliss
But all my if-only’s
Have just left me lonely

Bridge:
Everyday I long for you
As I wrote this song for you
Perchance you’ll return to me
Do you still have concerns for me

If only you had not turned away
If only we could reverse that day
Our lives would’ve been alright
And could have been full of light
But all my if-only’s
Have just left me lonely

Coda:
I pray the day I drop my if-only’s
And you come home to me, if only

© 2019 Charles M Anderson

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 Posted: Sun Jul 21st, 2019 07:42 pm
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Hi Charles. Clever writing and I love the coda at the end. Might be worth adding a few imperfect rhymes, just to surprise the listner and add a bit of variety. I'd love to hear the words put to a tune.



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 Posted: Mon Jul 22nd, 2019 04:50 pm
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Yea, Mike, I could make some near rhymes. It’s easy to do. One of my instructors said always go for the perfect rhyme first because it’s the most pleasing. So I do imperfect rhymes when perfect ones are unattainable.

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 Posted: Tue Sep 3rd, 2019 08:15 pm
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Hi Charles.
I feel what you wrote there. And I agree about the coda - good stuff, and really adds strength to your message. Great writing!
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 Posted: Tue Sep 10th, 2019 04:42 pm
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Thanks Kelly,
If only I could get a composer to put it to music and then get in on the radio. If only...

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 Posted: Tue Sep 10th, 2019 11:09 pm
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Very nice Charles!

I really those key lines:
But all my if-only’s
Have just left me lonely



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I like it Charles...especially the coda.

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 Posted: Tue Oct 8th, 2019 04:32 pm
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Yea Bunny, when you end things with a prayer, it usually opens doors —sometimes in unexpected ways.

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