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 Posted: Sun Jul 7th, 2019 10:30 pm
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What’s it like when,
He puts his hand in yours,
When you lay your head on his chest,
Is this what I deserve,
I don’t know if I can ever come back,
Your making me walk this line,
And tow it good,
But dear if he makes you happy,
Then please tell me so,

I haven’t always been the best man,
Or the worst one,
But I’ve always been right here,
When you need me,
I’ve tried my luck, lied,
And got caught,
Fought the good fight and won,
Just to lose the bad one,

You see baby,
Even when your gone spending time with him,
I’m right here waiting just to see you again,
I can’t think of a worse way to live,
Than waiting on the one you love to come home,
From spending the night with somewhere else,
Just know I wouldn’t do this for just anyone,

I got that tempter that sends the world a blaze,
I tend to light the fire and raise, the bridges I’m standing on,
Even if it’s my fastest way home,
I know you see the pain in my eye, and I can’t deny it’s true,
I’m still missing you,

I’m missing you,
Missing you,

If this is the end please let me down easy,
Take it slow and make me believe it,
Cause my fragile heart can’t take much more,
I just wish you’d come back where you belong, with me,

You see baby,
Even when your gone spending time with him,
I’m right here waiting just to see you again,
I can’t think of a worse way to live,
Than waiting on the one you love to come home,
From spending the night with somewhere else,
Just know I wouldn’t do this for just anyone,

I know you may not forgive me, for all I’ve done,
But damnit girl, I can look away, if we can run off into the sunset,
And lay like you never left home, in the first place,

Why don’t you miss me,
The way that I’m missing you,
Why can’t you kiss me,
The way I want you to,
This whole world is spinning upside down,
And I’m just hanging one,
Cause I’m missing you,
God knows, I’m missing you

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 Posted: Sun Jul 7th, 2019 10:47 pm
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Dmoss,
If you change all the “I miss you” sentences/phrases to “I’m missing you”, you’ll have a tittle. Or visa versa. I like “I’m Missing You.”

Charles

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 Posted: Sun Jul 7th, 2019 11:07 pm
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I like it, thanks you!

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 Posted: Mon Jul 8th, 2019 11:09 am
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For a title, maybe "Waiting for you"

You've got a freeform style going here, which I can imagine for hip hip or something of that nature, but I'm having trouble placing it into Country. Is there a band or song that does similar you can point me to in terms of the style you are going for?



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 Posted: Mon Jul 8th, 2019 02:03 pm
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I was thinking everything but the chorus to be ‘spoken’ singing, and the chorus sung out with a decent range, maybe something in the style of chase rice or maybe some of Brantley Gilbert’s none radio stuff. I’ve got a start to the guitar part of the chorus, just need to finish writing it and see if it changes or whatever.

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 Posted: Mon Jul 8th, 2019 10:59 pm
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Thanks! That helps :)



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