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Teardrop in my eye
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 Posted: Fri Jul 5th, 2019 05:17 pm
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Seamus
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You want to know how much I care
I promise these words are true
If you were a teardrop in my eye
I would never cry for fear of losing you

you worry I may leave
walk away from your door
put aside your insecurities
I couldn't love you more

Your past is where you were hurt
we're in a brand new day
wipe away your troubles
I know I'm here to stay

You want to know how much I care
I promise these words are true
If you were a teardrop in my eye
I would never cry for fear of losing you

I understand you're fearful
you were hurt so much before
so take my hand try to understand
I'll be here for evermore

You want to know how much I care
I promise these words are true
If you were a teardrop in my eye
I would never cry for fear of losing you

©Copyright Alan Evans 05/07/2019



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 Posted: Fri Jul 5th, 2019 10:44 pm
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It's got a nice warm, sentimental feel to it Alan.

I'm not sure I buy into the "If you were a teardrop in my eye" line though. It doesn't feel very complimentary, even though I get how you are using it in the next line.

I like how "wipe away your troubles" is consistent with the theme.



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 Posted: Sat Jul 6th, 2019 09:02 pm
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It’s a pleasant, smooth flowing lyric with a nice chorus. I’d probably cry just hearing it as a song, defeating the whole concept. But I like it anyway.

Charles

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