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How Do I Live, With Who I Can't Live Without
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 Posted: Wed Jun 26th, 2019 08:40 pm
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M.P. Dudash
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Empty walls hold, the voids.... from our pictures
In the sink stands, one glass... and its mine
Today I... Asked for an answer
I guess getting no answer, was my only sign

How do I live, with who I can't live without
She took all but memories
Now one is a crowd
A lamp with no shade,lights an old pull out couch
How do I live, with who I can't live without

20 years of marriage... all washed down the drain
My pleas for forgiveness... were all in vain...
She said that my loss, was her greatest gain
Now no amount of whiskey, can help ease the pain

How do I live, with who I can't live without
She took all but memories
Now one is a crowd
A lamp with no shade, lights an old pull out couch
How do I live with who I can't live without

What killed me when she left
Was that she wore a smile
How do I live, with who I can't live without

Copyright M.P. Dudash 6/26/2019

Last edited on Wed Jun 26th, 2019 08:41 pm by M.P. Dudash



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 Posted: Thu Jun 27th, 2019 12:20 am
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Mike, I like everything here except your title/hook - I think it's too convoluted.

I think you might have to comprise there. Even re-arranging it more like:
without one I can't live without
is still unwieldy. You may need to find some other line. Maybe:
How do I live, learn to live without
or something like that. But that doesn't fit every instance where you've used it.

But there's heart-wrenching emotion there. And some great lines:
Today I... Asked for an answer
I guess getting no answer, was my only sign

Now one is a crowd

She said that my loss, was her greatest gain


I do like the song, but it's central line is troublesome.



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 Posted: Thu Jun 27th, 2019 01:45 am
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Owen, that is really why I posted this to see what others thought. Though I think it may be the correct English for it (though I’m terrible at English),I get what you’re saying. I tried to figure a different way to say it but couldn’t come up with one. Oh well, thanks for looking.



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